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Message de mia4 posté le 27-04-2016 à 19:12:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis en Terminale S et je viens de finir ma notion sur "Myths and Heroes". Cependant, j'aimerais avoir votre avis. Pourriez-vous, s'il vous plaît, m'aider en me disant les défauts de mon texte ? Merci par avance de votre aide.
Bonne journée.
I am going to talk about the notion of Myths and heroes. To illustrate this notion, I would like to speak about world war heroes. We can ask ourselves one question : How can someone become a heroe ? To answer this question, I have chosen 3 documents : an excerpt from The Lie, a novel written by Helen Dunmore. The second document is an extract from a website article about the commemoration of the soldiers who died during the first world war. This article was written by Robin De Peyer. And the last document is an extract from Atonement, a novel written by Ian McEwan. Before explaining these documents, I would like to give a definition of a heroe. A heroe can be a mythological or legendary figure endowed with great strength, ability or sometimes super power. He is a object of extreme admiration. A heroe is also the main character in a litrary or event. But he is also a person admired for his achievements or noble qualities. He can be a ordinary people who did an act of bravery like to save someone's life.
The first document is the story of a soldier who is going off to war during the first world war. He briefly describes the sorldiers during the crossing of the English Channel and their arrival in France. He compares the tall vessel to the tiny soldiers. The narrator is deep in thought. He reflects on their destiny which is uncertaint. He wonders if they would come back, if they would survive. He doesn't look forward to arrinving in France because while he is on the ship he is not fighting. Although the crossing is roughish, it is better than the battlefield. When they arrive in France, the narrator is surprised because he expected a scene of war but he finds an ordinary town and the civilians were not stopping to look at them, they may have been accustomed to seeing soldiers.Thanks to this document, we have a brief inside in the soldier's state of mind. The novel underlines the soldiers' fears, concerns.
In the second document, Turner is a soldier who is in a town destroyed by the war. The narrator can see rubble, wounded soldiers, maimed corpses and buildings that have collapsed. It is a nightmarish vision. He endeavours to protect himself from this mayhem. He is concerned about the aftermath of the war. He wonders if someone will be able to name places and towns for the history books, if someone will pay attention to the ordeals of the soldiers and civilians, if the next generation will be able to find those responsibles for the slaughter of the population and finally if the survivors will testify. This document shows us what the soldiers' concerns are when they are in the battelfield and it makes us realize how much it was hard to them to live the war.
The last document describes us the ceremony of national commemoration. So as to pay homage to the soldiers who died in the Great War, the British government switched off all the lights in London, it projected a beam of light, it showed pictures of poppies and scenes of war on billboards and people lit candles and reflected on the victims. The text is fraught with emotion and proves that now poeple who died during the war are glorified because they gave their life to save their country.
To conclude, the three documents expose the three stages of the making of a war heroe. They show us how these ordinary poeple become heroes. Indeed, at the outbreak of the war, they were just civilians, then they went to war and finally they protected our lifes and their country. Without their sacrifice, the world as we know it today would probably not exist. We must not forget their gallantry, their bravery. They are our saviors. But the hardest part of the whole business is understanding what really happened. Despite of the evidences, testimonies we will never understand what they really lived.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2016 23:09
Message de mia4 posté le 27-04-2016 à 19:12:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je suis en Terminale S et je viens de finir ma notion sur "Myths and Heroes". Cependant, j'aimerais avoir votre avis. Pourriez-vous, s'il vous plaît, m'aider en me disant les défauts de mon texte ? Merci par avance de votre aide.
Bonne journée.
I am going to talk about the notion of Myths and heroes. To illustrate this notion, I would like to speak about world war heroes. We can ask ourselves one question : How can someone become a heroe ? To answer this question, I have chosen 3 documents : an excerpt from The Lie, a novel written by Helen Dunmore. The second document is an extract from a website article about the commemoration of the soldiers who died during the first world war. This article was written by Robin De Peyer. And the last document is an extract from Atonement, a novel written by Ian McEwan. Before explaining these documents, I would like to give a definition of a heroe. A heroe can be a mythological or legendary figure endowed with great strength, ability or sometimes super power. He is a object of extreme admiration. A heroe is also the main character in a litrary or event. But he is also a person admired for his achievements or noble qualities. He can be a ordinary people who did an act of bravery like to save someone's life.
The first document is the story of a soldier who is going off to war during the first world war. He briefly describes the sorldiers during the crossing of the English Channel and their arrival in France. He compares the tall vessel to the tiny soldiers. The narrator is deep in thought. He reflects on their destiny which is uncertaint. He wonders if they would come back, if they would survive. He doesn't look forward to arrinving in France because while he is on the ship he is not fighting. Although the crossing is roughish, it is better than the battlefield. When they arrive in France, the narrator is surprised because he expected a scene of war but he finds an ordinary town and the civilians were not stopping to look at them, they may have been accustomed to seeing soldiers.Thanks to this document, we have a brief inside in the soldier's state of mind. The novel underlines the soldiers' fears, concerns.
In the second document, Turner is a soldier who is in a town destroyed by the war. The narrator can see rubble, wounded soldiers, maimed corpses and buildings that have collapsed. It is a nightmarish vision. He endeavours to protect himself from this mayhem. He is concerned about the aftermath of the war. He wonders if someone will be able to name places and towns for the history books, if someone will pay attention to the ordeals of the soldiers and civilians, if the next generation will be able to find those responsibles for the slaughter of the population and finally if the survivors will testify. This document shows us what the soldiers' concerns are when they are in the battelfield and it makes us realize how much it was hard to them to live the war.
The last document describes us the ceremony of national commemoration. So as to pay homage to the soldiers who died in the Great War, the British government switched off all the lights in London, it projected a beam of light, it showed pictures of poppies and scenes of war on billboards and people lit candles and reflected on the victims. The text is fraught with emotion and proves that now poeple who died during the war are glorified because they gave their life to save their country.
To conclude, the three documents expose the three stages of the making of a war heroe. They show us how these ordinary poeple become heroes. Indeed, at the outbreak of the war, they were just civilians, then they went to war and finally they protected our lifes and their country. Without their sacrifice, the world as we know it today would probably not exist. We must not forget their gallantry, their bravery. They are our saviors. But the hardest part of the whole business is understanding what really happened. Despite of the evidences, testimonies we will never understand what they really lived.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-04-2016 23:09
Réponse: Bac/Myths and heroes de laure95, postée le 28-04-2016 à 19:00:58 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- We can ask ourselves (ce n'est pas la bon verbe ici) one question : How can someone become a heroe (orthographe)?
- a heroe.
_ He is a object ( A + MOT COMMENCANT PAR UNE CONSONNE)of extreme admiration.
- a litrary: ?
- a ordinary people ( A + SINGULIER)who did an act of bravery like to save someone's life.
- uncertaint: orthographe.
- arrinving
- we have a brief inside (mal dit) in the soldier's state of mind.
- how much it was hard to (pas la bonne préposition) them to live (mettre un autre verbe) the war.
- our lifes: orthographe.
- the evidences: singulier (mot invariable) testimonies we will never understand what they really lived (mettre un verbe plus précis).
Réponse: Bac/Myths and heroes de mia4, postée le 30-04-2016 à 17:51:23 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Je vous remercie encore de votre aide.
Bonne journée.
I am going to talk about the notion of Myths and heroes. To illustrate this notion, I would like to speak about world war heroes. We can wonder one question : How can someone become a hero ? To answer this question, I have chosen 3 documents : an excerpt from The Lie, a novel written by Helen Dunmore. The second document is an extract from a website article about the commemoration of the soldiers who died during the first world war. This article was written by Robin De Peyer. And the last document is an extract from Atonement, a novel written by Ian McEwan. Before explaining these documents, I would like to give a definition of a hero. A hero can be a mythological or legendary figure endowed with great strength, ability or sometimes super power. He is an object of extreme admiration. A hero is also the main character in a literary or event. But he is also a person admired for his achievements or noble qualities. He can be an ordinary person who did an act of bravery like to save someone's life.
The first document is the story of a soldier who is going off to war during the first world war. He briefly describes the sorldiers during the crossing of the English Channel and their arrival in France. He compares the tall vessel to the tiny soldiers. The narrator is deep in thought. He reflects on their destiny which is uncertain. He wonders if they would come back, if they would survive. He doesn't look forward to arriving in France because while he is on the ship he is not fighting. Although the crossing is roughish, it is better than the battlefield. When they arrive in France, the narrator is surprised because he expected a scene of war but he finds an ordinary town and the civilians were not stopping to look at them, they may have been accustomed to seeing soldiers.Thanks to this document, we have a brief insight into a soldier's state of mind. The novel underlines the soldiers' fears, concerns.
In the second document, Turner is a soldier who is in a town destroyed by the war. The narrator can see rubble, wounded soldiers, maimed corpses and buildings that have collapsed. It is a nightmarish vision. He endeavours to protect himself from this mayhem. He is concerned about the aftermath of the war. He wonders if someone will be able to name places and towns for the history books, if someone will pay attention to the ordeals of the soldiers and civilians, if the next generation will be able to find those responsibles for the slaughter of the population and finally if the survivors will testify. This document shows us what the soldiers' concerns are when they are in the battelfield and it makes us realize how much it was hard for them to experience the war.
The last document describes us the ceremony of national commemoration. So as to pay homage to the soldiers who died in the Great War, the British government switched off all the lights in London, it projected a beam of light, it showed pictures of poppies and scenes of war on billboards and people lit candles and reflected on the victims. The text is fraught with emotion and proves that now poeple who died during the war are glorified because they gave their life to save their country.
To conclude, the three documents expose the three stages of the making of a war hero. They show us how these ordinary poeple become heroes. Indeed, at the outbreak of the war, they were just civilians, then they went to war and finally they protected our lives and their country. Without their sacrifice, the world as we know it today would probably not exist. We must not forget their gallantry, their bravery. They are our saviors. But the hardest part of the whole business is understanding what really happened. Despite of the evidence, testimonies we will never understand what they really experience.
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