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Message de alfred73 posté le 23-03-2016 à 14:44:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
voici mon texte pour l'oral du Bac d'nglais. Est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait me dire s'il y a des fautes ou me le corriger s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Today I am going to speak about the notion Places and forms of power. First of all, I would like to give you a definition of power. Power is the ability to control others and to make things happen despite obstacles, resistance, or opposition. This of course leads to conflicts between those who have and exercise power and those who have none or little of it. In the US particularly, there is a form of power with the right to bear arms. So, that's why I will focus about this subject: Do guns grant you power and what are the consequences in the US?
To answer the question, we will focus on the second amendment and Americans' opinions and after that, the limits of that power.
To begin with the gun power, it’s important to know that the right to bear arms has been guarantee by the second amendment for a long time. The history of the country shows that the Americans have always felt the need to be armed. The Second Amendment of the United States Constitution is the amendment and the section of the Bill of Rights taught me that people have the right to keep and bear arms. The Second Amendment was adopted into the United States on December 15, 1791. The Second Amendment and the Bill of Rights were introduced into the United States by James Madison. But the second amendment may be understood differently by different people. Hence, you can understand that it is true only under some circumstances, namely that the army is not powerful enough and if they need civilianize to be organized in well-regulated militia. Furthermore, some of them see considerable advantages to bear arms. The best example is that they want to protect their families against bad guys or simply their identity because American people take care of the constitutional right to protects it. But others don’t see this as an advantage but more like a call to the slaughter. The opposition of opinions on the right to bear arms divides America. In other words, this opposition is shown in several ways including statements for and against the right to bear arms. For instance, in Texas this is where the Americans are the most for and in Washington, is where the Americans are the most against. When we watch TV, often we see debates between pro guns and anti-guns. While the pro guns encourage to increase the number of guns in America, anti-gun try to ban it.
Secondly, the fact that the USA is divided is particularly the consequences of the shootings and the number of deaths. For example, the Americans have experienced big traumas as a result of such shootings, for the most traumatic, in schools. The school shootings in December 14th, 2012 produced the deaths of 27 people, including 25 children. The killer was suspected of having mental problems but nothing has been proved. Given this staggering number of fatal shooting, two associations are known by their virulence. The first, is the NRA (National Rifle Association) which trains people and kids to shoot. This association promotes safety and 2sd amendment. People know how to kill someone precisely. And the Second association is the Brady Campaign. In opposition the NRA, the Brady Campaign wants to ban weapons in US because 17.228 is the number of deaths by guns, source by the Brady Campaign. As a famous sentence used by the NRA “Guns don’t kill people, people kill people”, I think, if guns were banned, criminals would find another way to kill someone else. Today, Americans have a problem with using firearms but they aren’t ready to accept the possibility to abolish the second amendment. As far as the right to bear arms was abolished, the government has to strengthen the safety of his population using more policemen.
To conclude, the right to bear arms is a big power for American people like an identity. Some of them love arms and want more arms in the US. They care about the second amendment. The number of deaths worry but they are so divided about this right that they do not put solutions in place yet.
I think it would be interesting to ask whether that the second amendment is still relevant for Americans today.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 23-03-2016 23:00
Message de alfred73 posté le 23-03-2016 à 14:44:29 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
voici mon texte pour l'oral du Bac d'nglais. Est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait me dire s'il y a des fautes ou me le corriger s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Today I am going to speak about the notion Places and forms of power. First of all, I would like to give you a definition of power. Power is the ability to control others and to make things happen despite obstacles, resistance, or opposition. This of course leads to conflicts between those who have and exercise power and those who have none or little of it. In the US particularly, there is a form of power with the right to bear arms. So, that's why I will focus about this subject: Do guns grant you power and what are the consequences in the US?
To answer the question, we will focus on the second amendment and Americans' opinions and after that, the limits of that power.
To begin with the gun power, it’s important to know that the right to bear arms has been guarantee by the second amendment for a long time. The history of the country shows that the Americans have always felt the need to be armed. The Second Amendment of the United States Constitution is the amendment and the section of the Bill of Rights taught me that people have the right to keep and bear arms. The Second Amendment was adopted into the United States on December 15, 1791. The Second Amendment and the Bill of Rights were introduced into the United States by James Madison. But the second amendment may be understood differently by different people. Hence, you can understand that it is true only under some circumstances, namely that the army is not powerful enough and if they need civilianize to be organized in well-regulated militia. Furthermore, some of them see considerable advantages to bear arms. The best example is that they want to protect their families against bad guys or simply their identity because American people take care of the constitutional right to protects it. But others don’t see this as an advantage but more like a call to the slaughter. The opposition of opinions on the right to bear arms divides America. In other words, this opposition is shown in several ways including statements for and against the right to bear arms. For instance, in Texas this is where the Americans are the most for and in Washington, is where the Americans are the most against. When we watch TV, often we see debates between pro guns and anti-guns. While the pro guns encourage to increase the number of guns in America, anti-gun try to ban it.
Secondly, the fact that the USA is divided is particularly the consequences of the shootings and the number of deaths. For example, the Americans have experienced big traumas as a result of such shootings, for the most traumatic, in schools. The school shootings in December 14th, 2012 produced the deaths of 27 people, including 25 children. The killer was suspected of having mental problems but nothing has been proved. Given this staggering number of fatal shooting, two associations are known by their virulence. The first, is the NRA (National Rifle Association) which trains people and kids to shoot. This association promotes safety and 2sd amendment. People know how to kill someone precisely. And the Second association is the Brady Campaign. In opposition the NRA, the Brady Campaign wants to ban weapons in US because 17.228 is the number of deaths by guns, source by the Brady Campaign. As a famous sentence used by the NRA “Guns don’t kill people, people kill people”, I think, if guns were banned, criminals would find another way to kill someone else. Today, Americans have a problem with using firearms but they aren’t ready to accept the possibility to abolish the second amendment. As far as the right to bear arms was abolished, the government has to strengthen the safety of his population using more policemen.
To conclude, the right to bear arms is a big power for American people like an identity. Some of them love arms and want more arms in the US. They care about the second amendment. The number of deaths worry but they are so divided about this right that they do not put solutions in place yet.
I think it would be interesting to ask whether that the second amendment is still relevant for Americans today.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 23-03-2016 23:00
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