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Message de charlene29 posté le 05-03-2016 à 17:08:30 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je passe mon oral de langues pour le Bac dans un mois, quelqu'un pourrait-il me corriger s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Let’s talk about places and forms of power. Places can be a country, a school, a family or a company. Forms can be the strength, the authority, the influence on people or society and the responsibility. And power can be the ability to govern, run, lead, decide, control, be able to or be dictatorship. For example, it can involve of power political, physical, mental or verbal power.
In class, we studied this notion through the topic: the power of clergymen.
We can wonder if clergymen have a power in different places.
To begin, we’re going to see the power of clergymen at school.
Then, let’s study the power of clergymen in USA.
We studied two extracts video of two different movies whose titles are “Jane Eyre”, which deals with the authority of a clergymen called Mr Brocklehurst from Jane Eyre. Both scenes take place in England, in Lowood a boarding school for girls where the main-character Jane Eyre is a student. We stand in the middle of the 19th century, during the Victorian period. In the first extract, the director of the boarding school, whose name is Mr Brocklehurst is delivering a speech to all members of Lowood about remarks on clothing and food for pupils. He is an authoritarian clergyman, with very strongly views. A teacher of Lowood, Miss Temple, gives bread and cheese to pupils twice because their only food is uneatable porridge. But the director doesn’t agree with that, he wants deprive girls of food and he doesn’t care if they hungry. For him, is normal that the girls don’t have proper clothes to protect them from the cold weather and if they suffer, they obliged to mend the holes on their clothes with just one needle for each. But this is a part of Mr Brocklehurst’s plan to render girls hardy, patient and self-denying. This man embodies the clergy, he gives an image negative because he is cruel, evil and stingy, in fact he doesn’t want to spend money on clothes, food or needles to the survive of pupils. At the end of the first extract, the wife of Mr Brocklehurst and his two daughters arrive, we saw that they wear luxury fabrics as velvet, silk and furs, that it’s the proof of Mr Brocklehurst’s hypocrisy.
During the second extract, Jane Eyre is drawing when her friend Helen joins her and sits opposite. Jane wants to draw her friend’s portrait so she asks her to take off the bonnet which she has on her head, in order to draw her “pretty hair”. In the same time, Mr Brocklehurst arrives and sees Helen without her bonnet, he calls her and delivers a speech about her vanity because of her red curly hair. For him, so for the clergy, it’s a sin to show her curly hair like that. Miss Temple affirms that Helen’s curls are naturally but Mr Brocklehurst doesn’t care it and moreover he is still hypocritical because his own daughters all have false curls and he doesn’t consider that as vanity. But he decides to punish Helen by cutting of their hair when Jane interrupts him by telling him that it’s God who gave Helen hairs. So, he asks her to fetch the scissors and he cuts hairs of Jane and Helen. He exercises his power on them.
We also saw others documents, about the power of clergymen in USA, particularly the power of MLK. In first time, we have seen a document about Martin Luther King’s life and his actions against segregation in the USA. MLK was born in 1929 in Georgia and he was shot in 1968 in Memphis, he was an eloquent Baptist minister and a leader of civil-rights movement in America. This clergyman promoted non-violent means to achieve civil-rights reforms. He is based on Mohandas Gandhi’s philosophy of non-violent social protest. King was one of the leaders of the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We studied another text about the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We learnt that African Americans refused to ride city buses to protest segregated seating, took place from 1955 to 1956. Four days before his beginning, an African-American woman, whose name is Rosa Parks, refused to yield her seat to a white man on a Montgomery bus. She was arrested and fined.
Finally, we analysed a recording of the famous speech of MLK which was pronounced in 1963 at the Lincolm Memorial. The title is “I have a dream”, he repeats “I have a dream” several times, he gets the attention of the audience which applaud and approve that he told, it’s the same attitude as a Baptist church, it emphasizes the power of this clergyman.
As a conclusion, we can say that the power of clergymen has an influence in different places like a boarding school or a country. Mr Brocklehurst has a verbal power and physical power whereas MLK has verbal power, and political power.
From my point of view, clergymen sometimes have to use their power only if necessary like MLK to negotiated the peace and without being too stiff like Mr Brocklehurst from the little girls of the boarding school.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-03-2016 18:33
Message de charlene29 posté le 05-03-2016 à 17:08:30 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je passe mon oral de langues pour le Bac dans un mois, quelqu'un pourrait-il me corriger s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Let’s talk about places and forms of power. Places can be a country, a school, a family or a company. Forms can be the strength, the authority, the influence on people or society and the responsibility. And power can be the ability to govern, run, lead, decide, control, be able to or be dictatorship. For example, it can involve of power political, physical, mental or verbal power.
In class, we studied this notion through the topic: the power of clergymen.
We can wonder if clergymen have a power in different places.
To begin, we’re going to see the power of clergymen at school.
Then, let’s study the power of clergymen in USA.
We studied two extracts video of two different movies whose titles are “Jane Eyre”, which deals with the authority of a clergymen called Mr Brocklehurst from Jane Eyre. Both scenes take place in England, in Lowood a boarding school for girls where the main-character Jane Eyre is a student. We stand in the middle of the 19th century, during the Victorian period. In the first extract, the director of the boarding school, whose name is Mr Brocklehurst is delivering a speech to all members of Lowood about remarks on clothing and food for pupils. He is an authoritarian clergyman, with very strongly views. A teacher of Lowood, Miss Temple, gives bread and cheese to pupils twice because their only food is uneatable porridge. But the director doesn’t agree with that, he wants deprive girls of food and he doesn’t care if they hungry. For him, is normal that the girls don’t have proper clothes to protect them from the cold weather and if they suffer, they obliged to mend the holes on their clothes with just one needle for each. But this is a part of Mr Brocklehurst’s plan to render girls hardy, patient and self-denying. This man embodies the clergy, he gives an image negative because he is cruel, evil and stingy, in fact he doesn’t want to spend money on clothes, food or needles to the survive of pupils. At the end of the first extract, the wife of Mr Brocklehurst and his two daughters arrive, we saw that they wear luxury fabrics as velvet, silk and furs, that it’s the proof of Mr Brocklehurst’s hypocrisy.
During the second extract, Jane Eyre is drawing when her friend Helen joins her and sits opposite. Jane wants to draw her friend’s portrait so she asks her to take off the bonnet which she has on her head, in order to draw her “pretty hair”. In the same time, Mr Brocklehurst arrives and sees Helen without her bonnet, he calls her and delivers a speech about her vanity because of her red curly hair. For him, so for the clergy, it’s a sin to show her curly hair like that. Miss Temple affirms that Helen’s curls are naturally but Mr Brocklehurst doesn’t care it and moreover he is still hypocritical because his own daughters all have false curls and he doesn’t consider that as vanity. But he decides to punish Helen by cutting of their hair when Jane interrupts him by telling him that it’s God who gave Helen hairs. So, he asks her to fetch the scissors and he cuts hairs of Jane and Helen. He exercises his power on them.
We also saw others documents, about the power of clergymen in USA, particularly the power of MLK. In first time, we have seen a document about Martin Luther King’s life and his actions against segregation in the USA. MLK was born in 1929 in Georgia and he was shot in 1968 in Memphis, he was an eloquent Baptist minister and a leader of civil-rights movement in America. This clergyman promoted non-violent means to achieve civil-rights reforms. He is based on Mohandas Gandhi’s philosophy of non-violent social protest. King was one of the leaders of the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We studied another text about the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We learnt that African Americans refused to ride city buses to protest segregated seating, took place from 1955 to 1956. Four days before his beginning, an African-American woman, whose name is Rosa Parks, refused to yield her seat to a white man on a Montgomery bus. She was arrested and fined.
Finally, we analysed a recording of the famous speech of MLK which was pronounced in 1963 at the Lincolm Memorial. The title is “I have a dream”, he repeats “I have a dream” several times, he gets the attention of the audience which applaud and approve that he told, it’s the same attitude as a Baptist church, it emphasizes the power of this clergyman.
As a conclusion, we can say that the power of clergymen has an influence in different places like a boarding school or a country. Mr Brocklehurst has a verbal power and physical power whereas MLK has verbal power, and political power.
From my point of view, clergymen sometimes have to use their power only if necessary like MLK to negotiated the peace and without being too stiff like Mr Brocklehurst from the little girls of the boarding school.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-03-2016 18:33
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de laure95, postée le 05-03-2016 à 18:11:38 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- And (à éviter en début de phrase)
- For example, it can involve of ( pas de préposition) power political, physical (adjectif +nom)
- in (article) USA.
-extracts video: ordre des mots)
- a clergymen: MEN = pluriel
- We stand: mal dit
- he wants deprive: verbe conjugué + TO + INFINITIF
- they (il manque un verbe)hungry.
- For him,(il manque un sujet) is normal
- they (are)obliged to mend
- an image negative: ordre des mots.
- he is cruel, evil (ce n'est pas un adjectif)and stingy,
- the survive (c'est un verbe, pas un nom) of pupils.
- In (pas la bonn préposition)the same time,
- Helen’s curls are naturally (mettre l'adjectif, pas l'adverbe)
_ Helen by cutting of their (pas le bon possessif) hair
- it’s God who gave Helen hairs (singulier).
- hairs of Jane and Helen: faire un cas possessif.
- We also saw others (pas au pluriel) documents, about the power of clergymen in (article) USA,
- In first time: ?
- to protest (préposition) segregated seating
Tu dois dire les idées principales de I HAVE A DREAM.
- to negotiated: TO + INFINITIF.
Finis ta conclusion par une ouverture: une question ou un lien avec une autre notion.
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de charlene29, postée le 15-03-2016 à 09:17:11 (S | E)
Bonjour laure95, merci j'ai suivi vos conseils et votre correction ! Je vous remets mon texte modifié :
Let’s talk about places and forms of power. Places can be a country, a school, a family or a company. Forms can be the strength, the authority, the influence on people or society and the responsibility. Power can be the ability to govern, run, lead, decide, control, be able to or be dictatorship. For example, it can involve power political, physical power, mental power or verbal power.
In class, we studied this notion through the topic: the power of clergymen.
We can wonder if clergymen have a power in different places.
To begin, we’re going to see the power of clergymen at school.
Then, let’s study the power of clergymen in the USA.
We studied two video extracts of two different movies whose titles are “Jane Eyre”, which deals with the authority of a clergyman called Mr Brocklehurst from Jane Eyre. Both scenes take place in England, in Lowood a boarding school for girls where the main-character Jane Eyre is a student. The scene takes place in the middle of the 19th century, during the Victorian period. In the first extract, the director of the boarding school, whose name is Mr Brocklehurst is delivering a speech to all members of Lowood about remarks on clothing and food for pupils. He is an authoritarian clergyman, with very strongly views. A teacher of Lowood, Miss Temple, gives bread and cheese to pupils twice because their only food is uneatable porridge. But the director doesn’t agree with that, he wants to deprive girls of food and he doesn’t care if they are hungry. For him, it is normal that the girls don’t have proper clothes to protect them from the cold weather and if they suffer, they are obliged to mend the holes on their clothes with just one needle for each. But this is a part of Mr Brocklehurst’s plan to render girls hardy, patient and self-denying. This man embodies the clergy, he gives a negative image because he is cruel and stingy, in fact he doesn’t want to spend money on clothes, food or needles to the survival of pupils. At the end of the first extract, the wife of Mr Brocklehurst and his two daughters arrive, we saw that they wear luxury fabrics as velvet, silk and furs, that it’s the proof of Mr Brocklehurst’s hypocrisy.
During the second extract, Jane Eyre is drawing when her friend Helen joins her and sits opposite. Jane wants to draw her friend’s portrait so she asks her to take off the bonnet which she has on her head, in order to draw her “pretty hair”. During the same time, Mr Brocklehurst arrives and sees Helen without her bonnet, he calls her and delivers a speech about her vanity because of her red curly hair. For him, so for the clergy, it’s a sin to show her curly hair like that. Miss Temple affirms that Helen’s curls are naturally but Mr Brocklehurst doesn’t care it and moreover he is still hypocritical because his own daughters all have false curls and he doesn’t consider that as vanity. But he decides to punish Helen by cutting of her hair when Jane interrupts him by telling him that it’s God who gave Helen hair. So, he asks her to fetch the scissors and he cuts Jane’s and Helen’s hair. He exercises his power on them.
We also saw other document, about the power of clergymen in the USA, particularly the power of MLK. At first, we have seen a document about Martin Luther King’s life and his actions against segregation in the USA. MLK was born in 1929 in Georgia and he was shot in 1968 in Memphis, he was an eloquent Baptist minister and a leader of civil-rights movement in America. This clergyman promoted non-violent means to achieve civil-rights reforms. He is based on Mohandas Gandhi’s philosophy of non-violent social protest. King was one of the leaders of the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We studied another text about the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We learnt that African Americans refused to ride city buses to protest to segregated seating, took place from 1955 to 1956. Four days before his beginning, an African-American woman, whose name is Rosa Parks, refused to yield her seat to a white man on a Montgomery bus. She was arrested and fined.
Finally, we analysed a recording of the famous speech of MLK which was pronounced in 1963 at the Lincolm Memorial. This message of hope is world-famous, good beyond the borders of the United States. The title of the speech, I have a dream, comes from of his most known passage where Luther King uses these words as anaphora. He gets the attention of the audience which applaud and approve that he told, it’s the same attitude as a Baptist church, it emphasizes the power of this clergyman.
As a conclusion, we can say that the power of clergymen has an influence in different places like a boarding school or a country. Mr Brocklehurst has a verbal power and physical power whereas MLK has verbal power, and political power.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-03-2016 13:18
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de charlene29, postée le 15-03-2016 à 09:17:58 (S | E)
Il manquait la fin de ma conclusion :
From my point of view, clergymen sometimes have to use their power only if necessary like MLK to negotiate the peace and without being too stiff like Mr Brocklehurst from the little girls of the boarding school.
We can wonder, what is the power of the clergy around the world?
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de laure95, postée le 15-03-2016 à 14:36:22 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- or be (article)dictatorship.
- We studied two video extracts of two different movies whose titles are “Jane Eyre”, which deals with: conjugaison (le sujet est : two video extracts)
- with very strongly views (opinions).
- But this is a (pas de A)part of Mr Brocklehurst’s plan to render (make) girls hardy, patient and self-denying.
- that it’s the proof of Mr Brocklehurst’s hypocrisy: pas 2 sujet: THAT est le sujet de IS.
- when her friend Helen joins her and sits opposite (ajouter HER).
- Jane wants to draw her friend’s portrait so she asks her to take off the (mettre un possessif à la place de THE) bonnet
- During (pas la bonne préposition)the same time,
- Miss Temple affirms that Helen’s curls are naturally (mettre l'adjectif pas l'adverbe)
- but Mr Brocklehurst doesn’t care it and moreover he is still hypocritical because his own daughters all (mot à enlever) have
- We also saw other document (un ou plusierus?), about the power of clergymen in the USA,
- to ride (go up)city buses to protest to (pas la bonne préposition) segregated seating,
- Four days before his (pas le bon possessif)beginning,
- good?
- The title of the speech, I have a dream, comes from of (enlever OF) his most known passage where Luther King uses these words as anaphora.
-He gets the attention of the audience which applaud and approve that (pas le bon relatif)he told: temps.
- like Mr Brocklehurst from (from ?)the little girls of the boarding school.
- We can wonder, what is the power of the clergy around the world?: question indirect: SUJET + VERBE CONJUGUE.
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de charlene29, postée le 16-03-2016 à 08:45:19 (S | E)
Bonjour laure95, j'ai a nouveau corrigé mes erreurs grâce à vous merci, je vous remets mon texte :
Let’s talk about places and forms of power. Places can be a country, a school, a family or a company. Forms can be the strength, the authority, the influence on people or society and the responsibility. Power can be the ability to govern, run, lead, decide, control, be able to or be a dictatorship. For example, it can involve power political, physical power, mental power or verbal power.
In class, we studied this notion through the topic: the power of clergymen.
We can wonder if clergymen have a power in different places.
To begin, we’re going to see the power of clergymen at school.
Then, let’s study the power of clergymen in the USA.
We studied two video extracts of two different movies whose titles are “Jane Eyre”, which deal with the authority of a clergyman called Mr Brocklehurst from Jane Eyre. Both scenes take place in England, in Lowood a boarding school for girls where the main-character Jane Eyre is a student. The scene takes place in the middle of the 19th century, during the Victorian period. In the first extract, the director of the boarding school, whose name is Mr Brocklehurst is delivering a speech to all members of Lowood about remarks on clothing and food for pupils. He is an authoritarian clergyman, with very strongly opinions. A teacher of Lowood, Miss Temple, gives bread and cheese to pupils twice because their only food is uneatable porridge. But the director doesn’t agree with that, he wants to deprive girls of food and he doesn’t care if they are hungry. For him, it is normal that the girls don’t have proper clothes to protect them from the cold weather and if they suffer, they are obliged to mend the holes on their clothes with just one needle for each. But this is part of Mr Brocklehurst’s plan to make girls hardy, patient and self-denying. This man embodies the clergy, he gives a negative image because he is cruel and stingy, in fact he doesn’t want to spend money on clothes, food or needles to the survival of pupils. At the end of the first extract, the wife of Mr Brocklehurst and his two daughters arrive, we saw that they wear luxury fabrics as velvet, silk and furs, that is the proof of Mr Brocklehurst’s hypocrisy.
During the second extract, Jane Eyre is drawing when her friend Helen joins her and sits opposite her. Jane wants to draw her friend’s portrait so she asks her to take off her bonnet which she has on her head, in order to draw her “pretty hair”. At the same time, Mr Brocklehurst arrives and sees Helen without her bonnet, he calls her and delivers a speech about her vanity because of her red curly hair. For him, so for the clergy, it’s a sin to show her curly hair like that. Miss Temple affirms that Helen’s curly are naturally but Mr Brocklehurst doesn’t care it and moreover he is still hypocritical because his own daughters have false curls and he doesn’t consider that as vanity. But he decides to punish Helen by cutting of her hair when Jane interrupts him by telling him that it’s God who gave Helen hair. So, he asks her to fetch the scissors and he cuts Jane’s and Helen’s hair. He exercises his power on them.
We also saw others documents, about the power of clergymen in the USA, particularly the power of MLK. At first, we have seen a document about Martin Luther King’s life and his actions against segregation in the USA. MLK was born in 1929 in Georgia and he was shot in 1968 in Memphis, he was an eloquent Baptist minister and a leader of civil-rights movement in America. This clergyman promoted non-violent means to achieve civil-rights reforms. He is based on Mohandas Gandhi’s philosophy of non-violent social protest. King was one of the leaders of the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We studied another text about the Montgomery Bus Boycott. We learnt that African Americans refused to go up city buses to protest against segregated seating, took place from 1955 to 1956. Four days before the beginning, an African-American woman, whose name is Rosa Parks, refused to yield her seat to a white man on a Montgomery bus. She was arrested and fined.
Finally, we analysed a recording of the famous speech of MLK which was pronounced in 1963 at the Lincolm Memorial. This message of hope is world-famous, far beyond the borders of the United States. The title of the speech, I have a dream, comes from his most known passage where Luther King uses these words as anaphora. He gets the attention of the audience which applaud and approve what he teld, it’s the same attitude as a Baptist church, it emphasizes the power of this clergyman.
As a conclusion, we can say that the power of clergymen has an influence in different places like a boarding school or a country. Mr Brocklehurst has a verbal power and physical power whereas MLK has verbal power, and political power.
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de charlene29, postée le 16-03-2016 à 08:46:12 (S | E)
la conclusion :
From my point of view, clergymen sometimes have to use their power only if necessary like MLK to negotiate the peace and without being too stiff like Mr Brocklehurst to the little girls of the boarding school.
We can wonder, what is the power of the clergy around the world?
je n'arrive pas à corriger ma question pour l'ouverture...
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de here4u, postée le 16-03-2016 à 14:20:23 (S | E)
Hello !
Pour une interrogative directe, l'ordre des mots est : Mot interrogatif + auxiliaire + sujet + ? => "what is the power of the clergy around the world?" = interrogative directe ; on pose une question !
Maintenant, si la phrase interrogative est introduite par "I know", "I wonder" etc., elle devient interrogative indirecte, perd son point d'interrogation, et prend la structure : I wonder + mot interrogatif + sujet + verbe. ... Facile, non ?
Now, it's your turn!
Réponse: Notion/places and forms of power de charlene29, postée le 20-03-2016 à 16:53:53 (S | E)
Bonjour, merci pour votre aide here4u!
Si je met "we can wonder what the power of clergymen represent around the world." est-ce correct? Merci d'avance.
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