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Message de puremoist posté le 03-11-2015 à 00:24:59 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je vous serais très reconnaissant si vous pouviez m'indiquer les erreurs commises dans cette rédaction:
After doing my final exams at school and passing with good grades, I went to university.
I got a degree in economics and I then went on to do a Master's degree in finance.
If I get this Master's, I would like to work on financial markets and especially on commodity markets.
In this regard, I have chosen an optional course about the trading of raw materials.
Moreover, although I am lacking knowledge and tools, I think I have some good qualities to become a trader : I am good with numbers and patient.
My ultimate goal would be to manage my own investment fund and, in particular, my own commodity fund, but I know it is a utopian idea...
En espérant obtenir des réponses,merci pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-11-2015 06:41
Message de puremoist posté le 03-11-2015 à 00:24:59 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je vous serais très reconnaissant si vous pouviez m'indiquer les erreurs commises dans cette rédaction:
After doing my final exams at school and passing with good grades, I went to university.
I got a degree in economics and I then went on to do a Master's degree in finance.
If I get this Master's, I would like to work on financial markets and especially on commodity markets.
In this regard, I have chosen an optional course about the trading of raw materials.
Moreover, although I am lacking knowledge and tools, I think I have some good qualities to become a trader : I am good with numbers and patient.
My ultimate goal would be to manage my own investment fund and, in particular, my own commodity fund, but I know it is a utopian idea...
En espérant obtenir des réponses,merci pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-11-2015 06:41
Réponse: Rédaction/ professional career de here4u, postée le 03-11-2015 à 12:04:07 (S | E)
Hello !
After doing(vocabulary) my final exams at school and passing with good grades, I went to university.
I got a degree in economics and I then went on to do a Master's degree in finance.
If I get this Master's, I would like to work on financial markets(clumsy) and especially on commodity markets.
In this regard, I have chosen an optional course about the trading of raw materials.
Moreover, although I am lacking knowledge and tools, I think I have some good qualities to become a trader(
): I am good with (construction) numbers and patient. My ultimate goal would be to manage my own investment fund and, in particular, my own commodity fund, but I know it is a utopian idea...
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