Bac/ Idée de progrès
Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais || En basMessage de jade1993 posté le 09-06-2015 à 21:12:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde !
Je suis en candidat individuelle au Bac Littéraire, et je dois présenter un oral en anglais sur la notion "Idée de Progrès"
J'aurais voulu avoir votre avis, et éventuellement me dire si j'ai des fautes (j'en ai c'est sûr!)
Je vous remercie :-)
I'll tell you about the notion of progress.
Progress is the action to go forward, to grow, to be better. For a society or for humanity, progress is changing in the direction of improvement, its gradual transformation towards more knowledge and happiness. It there's several kinds of progress that we can distinguish: Social progress, technological progress and scientific progress. The question we can ask is: What effects do they have on our modern world?
We first discuss social progress, including the gender equality. In the 19th century women were considered inferior to man and had no rights. It is through the suffragists who fought since 1870 for the right to vote, it will be granted 50 years later in 1920 in the United States. They fought for many things, including equality in the workplace, as men were paid more than women for the same work. The Equal Pay Act was a victory for women who have fought for equality. Signed in 1963 by President John F. Kennedy, the Equal Pay Act required private employers to give men and women equal pay for equal work.
Then, there's the technology. With cell phones, we can leave the house while having the possibility to contater others or to be contacted, no matter the place or we are. We can also, in case of accidents, emergency call for free, even if we do have more networks. Also thanks to this and to the computer, we can communicate with social networks like Facebook or Skype, and see live the people we are talking with the video phone or computer camera. This device is revolutionary because it allows us to keep in touch with people who are away from home.
Finally, there's the scientific progress. The prostheses are the perfect example. It there's still a few years back prosthetics were heavy, not aesthetic and could even cause infections. Now they are lighter, more responsive and above all more aesthetic. Scientists are constantly progesser in this area, only reports by the wars of the numbers of casualties and amputations. Thus, at the end of September 2013, an article was published in the "New England Journal of Medicine" of the first bionic prosthesis, that is to say a controllable prosthesis by thought. A video to peak even showing Zac Vawter amputated because of a car accident, up and down the stairs with his new prosthesis.
In conclusion, I would say that the progress they be social, or scientific technlogique is a necessary step for our future. They allow us to improve our living conditions, and have more to facilitate communication. But what must be remembered is that the progress is thanks to men, thanks to all those who give trouble every day, we can have a better life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-06-2015 23:12
Réponse: Bac/ Idée de progrès de gerondif, postée le 09-06-2015 à 23:25:37 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert.
Certaines erreurs relèvent du traducteur.
I'll tell you about the notion of progress.
Progress is the action to go forward, to grow, to be better. For a society or for humanity, progress is changing in the direction of improvement, its gradual transformation towards more knowledge and happiness. It there's(il y a c'est there is ou there are) several kinds of progress that we can distinguish: Social progress, technological progress and scientific progress. The question we can ask is: What effects do they have on our modern world?
We first discuss social progress, including the gender equality. In the 19th century women were considered inferior to men and had no rights. It is through the suffragists who fought(mettez un plus que parfait had + participe passé) since 1870 for the right to vote, that it
Then, there's
Finally, there's
In conclusion, I would say that the progress they be social(traduction littérale de "je voudrais dire que les progrès, qu'ils soient sociaux, scientifiques ou technologiques sont un pas nécessaire pour notre futur". Le traducteur ne s'en est pas sorti: faites plus simple: les progrès sociaux, scientifiques ou technologiques sont un pas necessaire...) , or scientific technlogique (français)is(pluriel) a necessary step for our future. They allow us to improve our living conditions, and have more(je me demande si vous n'avez pas tapé "ont plus" à la place de "en plus") to facilitate communication. But what must be remembered is that
Réponse: Bac/ Idée de progrès de jade1993, postée le 10-06-2015 à 01:30:17 (S | E)
Merci d'avoir pris le temps de me corriger, voici donc ma correction :
I'll tell you about the notion of progress.
Progress is the action to go forward, to grow, to be better. For a society or for humanity, progress is changing in the direction of improvement, its gradual transformation towards more knowledge and happiness. There is several kinds of progress that we can distinguish: Social progress, technological progress and scientific progress. The question we can ask is: What effects do they have on our modern world?
We first discuss social progress, including the gender equality. In the 19th century women were considered inferior to men and had no rights. It is through the suffragists who had fought since 1870 for the right to vote, that it was granted 50 years later in 1920 in the United States. They fought for many things, including equality in the workplace, as men were paid more than women for the same work. The Equal Pay Act was a victory for women who had fought for equality. Signed in 1963 by President John F. Kennedy, the Equal Pay Act required private employers to give men and women equal pay for equal work.
Then, there's technology. With cell phones, we can leave the house while having the possibility to contact other people or be contacted, no matter where we are. We can also, in case of accidents, place an emergency call for free, even if we do not have networks. Also thanks to this and to the computer, we can communicate with social networks like Facebook or Skype, and see the people we are talking to with the video phone or computer camera. This device is revolutionary because it allows us to keep in touch with people who are away from home.
Finally, there's progress.The prostheses are the perfect example. A few years back, prosthetics were heavy, not aesthetic and could even cause infections. Now they are lighter, more responsive and above all more aesthetic. Scientists continue to progressing in this area, to improve the life quality of the people who was amputated. Thus, at the end of September 2013, an article was published in the "New England Journal of Medicine" of the first bionic prosthesis, that is to say a controllable prosthesis by thought. They immortalized the moment by making a video of Zac Vawter amputated because of a car accident, walking up and down the stairs with his new prosthesis.
In conclusion, I think the social, scientific or technological progress are necessary for our future. They allow us to improve our living conditions, and facilitate our communication. Then, Thank you to all his men that improves our daily, for a better life.
Réponse: Bac/ Idée de progrès de gerondif, postée le 10-06-2015 à 10:21:52 (S | E)
Hello,
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert.
I'll tell you about the notion of progress.
Progress is the action to go forward, to grow, to be better. For a society or for humanity, progress is changing in the direction of improvement, its gradual transformation towards more knowledge and happiness. There is(pluriel) several kinds of progress that we can distinguish: Social progress, technological progress and scientific progress. The question we can ask is: What effects do they have on our modern world?
We first discuss social progress, including the gender equality. In the 19th century women were considered inferior to men and had no rights. It is through the suffragists who had fought since 1870 for the right to vote, that it was granted 50 years later in 1920 in the United States. They fought for many things, including equality in the workplace, as men were paid more than women for the same work. The Equal Pay Act was a victory for women who had fought for equality. Signed in 1963 by President John F. Kennedy, the Equal Pay Act required private employers to give men and women equal pay for equal work.
Then, there's technology. With cell phones, we can leave the house while having the possibility to contact other people or be contacted, no matter where we are. We can also, in case of accidents, place an emergency call for free, even if we do not have networks. Also thanks to this and to the computer, we can communicate with social networks like Facebook or Skype, and see the people we are talking to with the video phone or computer camera. This device is revolutionary because it allows us to keep in touch with people who are away from home.
Finally, there's progress.The prostheses are the perfect example. A few years back, prosthetics were heavy, not aesthetic and could even cause infections. Now they are lighter, more responsive and above all more aesthetic. Scientists continue to progress in this area, to improve the life quality of the people who was(pluriel) amputated. Thus, at the end of September 2013, an article was published in the "New England Journal of Medicine" of the first bionic prosthesis, that is to say a controllable prosthesis by thought. They immortalized the moment by making a video of Zac Vawter amputated because of a car accident, walking up and down the stairs with his new prosthesis.
In conclusion, I think that
Ah, vous continuez à traduire du français faux qui se retrouve faux en anglais:
"alors merci à tous ses(au lieu de ces) hommes qui améliorent notre quotidien.
Thank you to all his men that improves our daily(daily est l'adjectif quotidien, il lui faut un nom)
Let me say thank you to all these men who improve our daily lives.
Réponse: Bac/ Idée de progrès de jade1993, postée le 10-06-2015 à 20:56:57 (S | E)
J'ai pris note de vos corrections, je vous remercie beaucoup pour votre aide !
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