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Message de laudu posté le 01-02-2015 à 21:54:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois rendre un essai sur le sujet suivant :
According to you what makes a businessman successful ? explain and give examples with 100 words.
J'ai commencé et j'aimerai que quelqu'un me donne son avis et me corrige :
"According to me : great ideas and innovations are the key words to be successful as a businessman.
I would like to talk about two businessmen : Steve JOBS and Ray KROC :
- Steve JOBS, he founded Apple, bringing something new in the Informative Technology. Apple attracts an impressive number of customers thanks to their computers, tablets, iphones.
- Ray KROC, bought Mc Donald in …. Since, he has never stopped looking for new methods to attract customers : from drive-in windows to birthday parties. Now, in some places, pizza is on the menu and Mc Donald's in Holland sells a vegetarian burger.
To conclude, the success of their respective companies shows that they are the successful businessmen and leaders."
Mais malheureusement j'ai trop de mots : quelqu'un pourrait m'aider ? je dois rendre ce devoir ce soir.
Thank you in advance for your help. Laurence
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-02-2015 22:38
Message de laudu posté le 01-02-2015 à 21:54:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois rendre un essai sur le sujet suivant :
According to you what makes a businessman successful ? explain and give examples with 100 words.
J'ai commencé et j'aimerai que quelqu'un me donne son avis et me corrige :
"According to me : great ideas and innovations are the key words to be successful as a businessman.
I would like to talk about two businessmen : Steve JOBS and Ray KROC :
- Steve JOBS, he founded Apple, bringing something new in the Informative Technology. Apple attracts an impressive number of customers thanks to their computers, tablets, iphones.
- Ray KROC, bought Mc Donald in …. Since, he has never stopped looking for new methods to attract customers : from drive-in windows to birthday parties. Now, in some places, pizza is on the menu and Mc Donald's in Holland sells a vegetarian burger.
To conclude, the success of their respective companies shows that they are the successful businessmen and leaders."
Mais malheureusement j'ai trop de mots : quelqu'un pourrait m'aider ? je dois rendre ce devoir ce soir.
Thank you in advance for your help. Laurence
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-02-2015 22:38
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