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Message de terraf posté le 17-01-2015 à 20:45:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Est-ce que vous pourriez corriger le texte que j'ai fait pour l'oral du Bac s'il vous plaît ?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Spaces and exchanges
First of all, we have to define these two concepts. An exchange is the act of giving or receiving something in substitution for something else. In today’s modern-day world these exchanges can take several forms: economic – work exchanges, exchange of goods, trading across borders, cultural – exchange of ideas, information, education, movement of people – immigration, student exchanges, gap years… Our modern-day world is changing quickly and seems to be a smaller place due to improvements in technology and communication. Information exchange has become easier thanks to the internet and international trade has enabled us to expand our markets for goods and services that might not have been available to us. These different cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have transformed and characterized our modern-day world – sometimes for better, sometimes for worse.
We will try to answer the following question: What impact do global cities have on people’s everyday lives?
Global cities have a positive aspect on people’s everyday lives.
Indeed, when you live in a global city, there is an important cultural diversity. Diversity which is a very healthy thing because its allow people to better understand each other. In class, we’ve studied that In London, there were 37 % of the population that wasn’t white. Therefore, there is a big cultural diversity in this global city. Nowadays, London tries to be an environmentally friendly city for the health of its population. Concentrated cities as London deliver also benefits such as lower energy consumption and water savings as activities.
Singapore such as London has positive aspects on its inhabitants. Due to a very strict governmental politic, the city-state offers a very nice life conditions. For example you aren’t allowed to chew chewing-gum or to smoke outside, otherwise you could get a one thousand dollars fine. So it’s make Singapore one of the cleanest city in the world... Moreover, modern Singapore is now an economic powerhouse with one of the world’s highest per capita incomes and a city that has one of the lowest crimes rates. But those perfect cities aren’t as perfect as it seems. To live in a city like this, people have to know that their human right are highly violate.
But global cities are also synonym of issues.
Many global cities suffer from congestion. Indeed, many people mean pollution. In 1952, in London, the month of December had started with a very cold weather. The population responded by burning even more coal to heat their homes. The result was The Great Yellow Smog, a thick fog that plunged everyone in the city in a total darkness. Modern researches have put the death toll closer to 12.000 because of the pollution of the smog, the aggressions, the murders and even the accidents. We can also talk about Singapore. On the one hand, we showed that the city has many good aspects, but on the other hand, Singapore hasn’t any common culture, so the population isn't so united. On top of that, it hasn’t natural resources as gas or oil. Singapore has too many rules and as a consequence, it's a very controlled society, were there are no real individual freedom and no real creativity. Too much security means less liberty.
There is another big issue in the global city: congestion. The fact there are a lot of activity in the center lead people to use their cars to join their workplace. So cities are trying to resolve those disadvantages with projects such as London’s road congestion charge. This project limits the number of cars in downtown London to avoid pollution. There is also the BedZED project, which is an environmentally friendly housing development. The project is designed to use only renewable sources generated on site. Because of BedZED's low-energy-emission concept, cars are discouraged; the project act as an incentive for public transport, cycling, and walking, and has limited parking space. There are good rail and bus links in the immediate area. So generally, global cities are aware of their weakness and try many things to assure their population a very good living experience.
To sum up, it’s obvious that global cities, like London or Singapore, have a real impact on people and on exchanges. Whether it be the cultural diversity, life condition or pollution, theses impacts are both good and negative. And I think that to make the world a better place, global cities have to exist. This is they that connect the whole world and take worldwide decisions. But we can ask one question, are global cities really sustainable?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-01-2015 20:57
Message de terraf posté le 17-01-2015 à 20:45:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Est-ce que vous pourriez corriger le texte que j'ai fait pour l'oral du Bac s'il vous plaît ?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Spaces and exchanges
First of all, we have to define these two concepts. An exchange is the act of giving or receiving something in substitution for something else. In today’s modern-day world these exchanges can take several forms: economic – work exchanges, exchange of goods, trading across borders, cultural – exchange of ideas, information, education, movement of people – immigration, student exchanges, gap years… Our modern-day world is changing quickly and seems to be a smaller place due to improvements in technology and communication. Information exchange has become easier thanks to the internet and international trade has enabled us to expand our markets for goods and services that might not have been available to us. These different cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have transformed and characterized our modern-day world – sometimes for better, sometimes for worse.
We will try to answer the following question: What impact do global cities have on people’s everyday lives?
Global cities have a positive aspect on people’s everyday lives.
Indeed, when you live in a global city, there is an important cultural diversity. Diversity which is a very healthy thing because its allow people to better understand each other. In class, we’ve studied that In London, there were 37 % of the population that wasn’t white. Therefore, there is a big cultural diversity in this global city. Nowadays, London tries to be an environmentally friendly city for the health of its population. Concentrated cities as London deliver also benefits such as lower energy consumption and water savings as activities.
Singapore such as London has positive aspects on its inhabitants. Due to a very strict governmental politic, the city-state offers a very nice life conditions. For example you aren’t allowed to chew chewing-gum or to smoke outside, otherwise you could get a one thousand dollars fine. So it’s make Singapore one of the cleanest city in the world... Moreover, modern Singapore is now an economic powerhouse with one of the world’s highest per capita incomes and a city that has one of the lowest crimes rates. But those perfect cities aren’t as perfect as it seems. To live in a city like this, people have to know that their human right are highly violate.
But global cities are also synonym of issues.
Many global cities suffer from congestion. Indeed, many people mean pollution. In 1952, in London, the month of December had started with a very cold weather. The population responded by burning even more coal to heat their homes. The result was The Great Yellow Smog, a thick fog that plunged everyone in the city in a total darkness. Modern researches have put the death toll closer to 12.000 because of the pollution of the smog, the aggressions, the murders and even the accidents. We can also talk about Singapore. On the one hand, we showed that the city has many good aspects, but on the other hand, Singapore hasn’t any common culture, so the population isn't so united. On top of that, it hasn’t natural resources as gas or oil. Singapore has too many rules and as a consequence, it's a very controlled society, were there are no real individual freedom and no real creativity. Too much security means less liberty.
There is another big issue in the global city: congestion. The fact there are a lot of activity in the center lead people to use their cars to join their workplace. So cities are trying to resolve those disadvantages with projects such as London’s road congestion charge. This project limits the number of cars in downtown London to avoid pollution. There is also the BedZED project, which is an environmentally friendly housing development. The project is designed to use only renewable sources generated on site. Because of BedZED's low-energy-emission concept, cars are discouraged; the project act as an incentive for public transport, cycling, and walking, and has limited parking space. There are good rail and bus links in the immediate area. So generally, global cities are aware of their weakness and try many things to assure their population a very good living experience.
To sum up, it’s obvious that global cities, like London or Singapore, have a real impact on people and on exchanges. Whether it be the cultural diversity, life condition or pollution, theses impacts are both good and negative. And I think that to make the world a better place, global cities have to exist. This is they that connect the whole world and take worldwide decisions. But we can ask one question, are global cities really sustainable?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-01-2015 20:57
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