Writing/aide

Writing/aide
Message de souad123 posté le 21-10-2014 à 18:13:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour.
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte s'il vous plaît ? et merci d'avance
For me,i think that first we should believe on there skills so that they will have confidence ,besides we have to give them some space to create and find out what they want to do and give them all the tools that they need to improve themselves,finaly we do not have to forget to encourge them so that they perform better.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 21-10-2014 18:28

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Réponse: Writing/aide de gerondif, postée le 21-10-2014 à 18:18:30 (S | E)
Hello,

For me,i (majuscule) think that first we should believe on there (you mistake there for their)skills so that they will have confidence ,besides we have to give them some space to create and find out what they want to do and give them all the tools (that) they need to improve themselves,finaly we do not have to (no, use "mustn't", we don't have to has the following meaning: we are not forced to...) forget to encourage them so that they perform better (perform sounds strange to me here).

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Réponse: Writing/aide de souad123, postée le 21-10-2014 à 19:57:35 (S | E)
merci beaucoup à vous
Maintenant j'ai corrigé
For me,I think that first we should believe on their skills so that they will have confidence ,besides we have to give them some space to create and find out what they want to do and give them all the tools they need to improve ,finaly we are not forced to forget to encourage them so that they perform better.

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Réponse: Writing/aide de melmoth, postée le 21-10-2014 à 21:42:29 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Encore quelques petits problèmes :

For me,I think that first we should believe on their skills so that they will have confidence ,besides we have to give them some space to create and find out what they want to do and give them all the tools they need to improve ,finaly we are not forced to forget to encourage them so that they perform better.

1) Ponctuation : pas d'espace avant une virgule, un espace après.
2) believe ne fonctionne pas avec la préposition on, il en faut une autre.
3) "We are not forced to forget to encourage them" ne veut pas dire grand-chose, reformuler...

Bien à vous

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