Correction/ lettre motivation
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Message de toinou22 posté le 17-11-2013 à 18:36:52 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je m'appelle Antoine et j'aurais besoin d'aide pour la correction de ma lettre de motivation.
Merci d'avance
Dear Madam, dear Sir,
Holder of a BTS Ventes et Productions Touristiques, and currently in third year of bachelor’s degree in Applied Foreign Languages in English and Spanish, I am particularly interested in your job of French language assistant.
This year, I have chosen « French as a Foreign Language » as an optional subject in order to best prepare for this job. In this context, I am currently doing an intership in an association and I have the opportunity to give lessons to foreigners, of whom a Canadian girl who doesn’t speak french at all, which already allows me to improve my English. I have always been very interested in this language, so I can speak without too much difficulty.
This job would be a great opportunity, because it would allow me to be in total immersion in an English-speaking country, which is obviously the best way to learn a language. It would also be a first professional experience in the world of education. I would particularly enjoy discovering a new country, its inhabitants, its traditions, its culture…
Moreover, the fact of transmitting the french language and the french culture would be rewarding and gratifying.
I have been looking for many information about the tasks required, so I am aware of the difficulties I may experience (differences between our education systems, students’ motivation…) and I am prepared for it.
I look forward to reveiving your reply.
Yours faithfully,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-11-2013 18:47
Message de toinou22 posté le 17-11-2013 à 18:36:52 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je m'appelle Antoine et j'aurais besoin d'aide pour la correction de ma lettre de motivation.
Merci d'avance
Dear Madam, dear Sir,
Holder of a BTS Ventes et Productions Touristiques, and currently in third year of bachelor’s degree in Applied Foreign Languages in English and Spanish, I am particularly interested in your job of French language assistant.
This year, I have chosen « French as a Foreign Language » as an optional subject in order to best prepare for this job. In this context, I am currently doing an intership in an association and I have the opportunity to give lessons to foreigners, of whom a Canadian girl who doesn’t speak french at all, which already allows me to improve my English. I have always been very interested in this language, so I can speak without too much difficulty.
This job would be a great opportunity, because it would allow me to be in total immersion in an English-speaking country, which is obviously the best way to learn a language. It would also be a first professional experience in the world of education. I would particularly enjoy discovering a new country, its inhabitants, its traditions, its culture…
Moreover, the fact of transmitting the french language and the french culture would be rewarding and gratifying.
I have been looking for many information about the tasks required, so I am aware of the difficulties I may experience (differences between our education systems, students’ motivation…) and I am prepared for it.
I look forward to reveiving your reply.
Yours faithfully,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-11-2013 18:47
Réponse: Correction/ lettre motivation de toinou22, postée le 19-11-2013 à 12:18:46 (S | E)
S'il vous plaît
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-11-2013 12:29
Réponse: Correction/ lettre motivation de lucile83, postée le 19-11-2013 à 12:29:00 (S | E)
Hello,
Erreurs les plus importantes en bleu.
Dear Madam, dear Sir,
Holder of a BTS Ventes et Productions Touristiques, and currently in third year of bachelor’s degree in Applied Foreign Languages in English and Spanish, I am particularly interested in your job of French language assistant.
This year, I have chosen « French as a Foreign Language » as an optional subject in order to best prepare for this job. In this context, I am currently doing an intership in an association and I have the opportunity to give lessons to foreigners, of whom a Canadian girl who doesn’t speak french at all, which already allows me to improve my English. I have always been very interested in this language, so I can speak without too much difficulty.
This job would be a great opportunity, because it would allow me to be in total immersion in an English-speaking country, which is obviously the best way to learn a language. It would also be a first professional experience in the world of education. I would particularly enjoy discovering a new country, its inhabitants, its traditions, its culture…
Moreover, the fact of transmitting the french language and the french culture would be rewarding and gratifying.
I have been looking for many information about the tasks required, so I am aware of the difficulties I may experience (differences between our education systems, students’ motivation…) and I am prepared for it.
I look forward to reveiving your reply.
Yours faithfully,
Réponse: Correction/ lettre motivation de toinou22, postée le 20-11-2013 à 22:46:49 (S | E)
Re bonjour,
Dear Madam, dear Sir, -> Dear Sir or Madam
best prepare for this job -> je ne vois pas d'erreur
of whom -> de même, car whose n'a pas l'air de convenir
many information -> much information
I look forward to receiving
Réponse: Correction/ lettre motivation de lucile83, postée le 21-11-2013 à 08:31:10 (S | E)
Hello,
- as an optional subject in order to prepare better/to get better prepared for this job.
- I have the opportunity to give lessons to foreigners, including a Canadian girl ...
The rest is all right.
Réponse: Correction/ lettre motivation de toinou22, postée le 21-11-2013 à 12:04:37 (S | E)
Merci !
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