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Message de fanouille posté le 04-10-2013 à 17:56:00 (S | E | F)
Hello,
can you correct my mistakes in my essay please?
Thank you.
My dear Annick and Laurent
It was kind of you to write to me.
I am in good health. I have visited many place, I traveled Canada always accompagnied by our faithfull partis leader: Kaitlyn y Brayden. They are wonderful! I was in Banf National Park in sightseeing tour, our guides were great!
I saw the Mount Chephen (mountain located in Mistaya River Valley) and waterfowl lake, it was awesome! I also visited the smallest Park st. Louwrence Island National (9km2.
Yet, what I liked the moqst is the Niagara falls and the Ireland Park.
The Ireland Park commémorâtes the tens of thousand who fled Ireland during the Great Famine. In this park I watched a very weird statue, she represented Orphan and she named "Orphan Boy". A child's hands are clasped. This statue has troubled me.
I thinks, I will extend my holidays of few weeks. I still have so much to see. I had really good Holiday, I I have really lovely time in this country.
Give my love to the rest of family and please give my best wishes to Ludivine.
Fanny.
xoxoxox
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-10-2013 18:01
Message de fanouille posté le 04-10-2013 à 17:56:00 (S | E | F)
Hello,
can you correct my mistakes in my essay please?
Thank you.
My dear Annick and Laurent
It was kind of you to write to me.
I am in good health. I have visited many place, I traveled Canada always accompagnied by our faithfull partis leader: Kaitlyn y Brayden. They are wonderful! I was in Banf National Park in sightseeing tour, our guides were great!
I saw the Mount Chephen (mountain located in Mistaya River Valley) and waterfowl lake, it was awesome! I also visited the smallest Park st. Louwrence Island National (9km2.
Yet, what I liked the moqst is the Niagara falls and the Ireland Park.
The Ireland Park commémorâtes the tens of thousand who fled Ireland during the Great Famine. In this park I watched a very weird statue, she represented Orphan and she named "Orphan Boy". A child's hands are clasped. This statue has troubled me.
I thinks, I will extend my holidays of few weeks. I still have so much to see. I had really good Holiday, I I have really lovely time in this country.
Give my love to the rest of family and please give my best wishes to Ludivine.
Fanny.
xoxoxox
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-10-2013 18:01
Réponse: Corriger /essai de notrepere, postée le 05-10-2013 à 21:58:59 (S | E)
BonjourLe mot 'commémorâtes' suggérerait que vous avez employé un traducteur en ligne. Nous ne corrigeons jamais un texte qui provient d'une machine.
Réponse: Corriger /essai de fanouille, postée le 06-10-2013 à 17:48:41 (S | E)
Certains mots viennent en effet d'une "machine". Mais la plus grande majorité vient de mon cours et des informations trouvées sur ce site.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-10-2013 21:14
Réponse: Corriger /essai de notrepere, postée le 06-10-2013 à 23:09:43 (S | E)
HelloNo articles before proper nouns (generally). Niagara Falls, not the Niagara Falls. Ireland Park, not the Ireland Park. "Moqst" is not a word in English. There are several spelling errors. The spell-checker should be able to find those for you.
Réponse: Corriger /essai de fanouille, postée le 07-10-2013 à 18:44:19 (S | E)
Thank you very much.
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