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Message de jadee55 posté le 01-10-2013 à 21:46:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je dois faire une petite présentation un peu banale sur mon identité, mes hobbies, ma personnalité (etc)
Pourriez-vous m'indiquer s'il y a des erreurs s'il vous plaît?
Je vous remercie beaucoup pour le temps que vous passerez afin de m'aider dans mes devoirs.
Let me introduce myself: My name is Jade, and my family name is Lefèvre. I was born on the fifth of February nineteen, ninety nine. I’m Aquarius and I’m 14 years old. I’m French and I live in northern France, in Rang du Fliers. I think I have a good personality: I’m sociable, talkative, calm, attentive, honest, optimist and humble. I’m hard working and tidy. But sometimes, I’m a bit shy and impatient. I'm not hypocritical. My best quality is that I’m generous. I’m good at French, History and Math but I’m bad at art. I dream of living in USA and travelling over the world.
My favorite hobbies are playing tennis, swimming and walking. I’m playing tennis and I’m swimming once a week. I walk every afternoon. I’m like listening music (rock, pop…) my favorite singer is Kurt Cobain. I love reading, playing videogames, watching TV and singing. I'm interested in the science and in the medicine. I love reading the people magazines and I would like to meet Jaden Smith. I like school and my favorite subject is English because my English teacher is nice.
I haven't got Best Friend but I've got good friends. I haven’t got brothers but I’ve one sister. Her name is Lola. She is seventeen years old. She is really funny! My parents called Edouart and Hélène.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-10-2013 22:16
Message de jadee55 posté le 01-10-2013 à 21:46:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je dois faire une petite présentation un peu banale sur mon identité, mes hobbies, ma personnalité (etc)
Pourriez-vous m'indiquer s'il y a des erreurs s'il vous plaît?
Je vous remercie beaucoup pour le temps que vous passerez afin de m'aider dans mes devoirs.
Let me introduce myself: My name is Jade, and my family name is Lefèvre. I was born on the fifth of February nineteen, ninety nine. I’m Aquarius and I’m 14 years old. I’m French and I live in northern France, in Rang du Fliers. I think I have a good personality: I’m sociable, talkative, calm, attentive, honest, optimist and humble. I’m hard working and tidy. But sometimes, I’m a bit shy and impatient. I'm not hypocritical. My best quality is that I’m generous. I’m good at French, History and Math but I’m bad at art. I dream of living in USA and travelling over the world.
My favorite hobbies are playing tennis, swimming and walking. I’m playing tennis and I’m swimming once a week. I walk every afternoon. I’m like listening music (rock, pop…) my favorite singer is Kurt Cobain. I love reading, playing videogames, watching TV and singing. I'm interested in the science and in the medicine. I love reading the people magazines and I would like to meet Jaden Smith. I like school and my favorite subject is English because my English teacher is nice.
I haven't got Best Friend but I've got good friends. I haven’t got brothers but I’ve one sister. Her name is Lola. She is seventeen years old. She is really funny! My parents called Edouart and Hélène.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-10-2013 22:16
Réponse: Présentation /correction de gerondif, postée le 01-10-2013 à 22:35:31 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Let me introduce myself: My name is Jade, and my family name is Lefèvre. I was born on the fifth of February nineteen, ninety nine. I’m Aquarius and I’m 14 years old. I’m French and I live in northern France, in Rang du Fliers. I think I have a good personality: I’m sociable, talkative, calm, attentive, honest, optimist and humble. I’m hard working and tidy. But sometimes, I’m a bit shy and impatient. I'm not hypocritical. My best quality is that I’m generous. I’m good at French, History and Math but I’m bad at art. I dream of living in the USA and travelling all over the world. (the + pays pluriel)
My favorite hobbies are playing tennis, swimming and walking. I’m playing tennis and I’m swimming once a week(mauvais choix de présent). I walk every afternoon. I’m like listening (to listen to something)music (rock, pop…) my favorite singer is Kurt Cobain. I love reading, playing videogames, watching TV and singing. I'm interested in the science and in the medicine (pas de "the" quand on parle en général). I love reading
I haven't got a Best Friend but I've got (a few/some/many)good friends. I haven’t got (any) brothers but I’ve(me gène un peu s'il n'y a pas got) one sister. Her name is Lola. She is seventeen years old. She is really funny! My parents ("sont nommés", il manque l'auxiliaire être) called Edouart and Hélène.
Sinon, c'est pas mal !
Réponse: Présentation /correction de jadee55, postée le 13-10-2013 à 10:44:38 (S | E)
Bonjour, je vous remercie beaucoup pour votre aide qui m'a été très utile et pour le temps que vous avez passé pour m'aider !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-10-2013 12:13
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