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Message de undo posté le 07-06-2013 à 12:24:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'aimerais une correction de mon devoir s'il vous plaît !
Merci pour vos réponses.
New Zealand :
I'm going to talk about the notion of locations and exchanges.
First of all i would like to give a definition of the notion. It's a the different spaces of the world are nowadays more and more connected to each other. The exchanges can appear on many forms: people, trade, information. To illustrate the notion, i have chosen three documents who present the New Zealand.
First we have a map with any extract. We can see that New Zealand is a country in Oceania, South-western Pacific Ocean comprising two main islands (the North Island and the South Island), and smaller islands. Located about 2000 km from Australia which it is separated by the Tasman Sea, New Zealand is geographically isolated. This isolation has allowed the development of flora and fauna endemic rich and varied, ranging from giant kauri weta insects and through the kaponga and kiwi, the latter two being symbols of the country.
We have different paragraph who represent the country in different point of view.
This country is represented by the Maori and Their Culture with tattoos and famous haka that we know thanks to rugby. The animal : the kiwi, this is New Zealand's national icon and unofficial national emblem. We know the country too with the cinema “the lord of the rings” or “the hobbit” where we see beautiful landscape includes vast moutains chains, steaming volcanoes and lush rainforests.
During the history of new zealand, there was an exchange of cultur like we can see with,,,
The second documents its a picture of the mural on the wall of a public building in Waipu ? North Island. We can see the Maori on the sea a new community who arrived.
Maori have always organized their lifes with in tribus who kept fighting each other to defend their territories and became a nation to kill their ennemies on this mural reminder of the past , this people just coming. We can imagine from this scene the clash between this two communities and if we refert to the N Z history the memory people have been constenbly fishing for a proximetly 2 centuries. Be a minority in the begining of 90's century there population was almost decimated.
Over the years, the country opens to the other countries,,,
The last document is « multicultural new zealand », this text show the advantages of living in New Zealand like dream of safe community, safe environment, good education for the kids, small population, lot of ressources and agriculture.
New Zealand's society is characterizing by the multiculturalism.
They try to live together because some ethnics can't accepted live together.
This place is very strategic because they are connected to Asia and they are touch by the anglo saxon society.
To conclued, i think the exchanges are very important to a country. The impact can be postiv or negativ but with exchanges you meeting people and discover other ideas.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-06-2013 12:28
Message de undo posté le 07-06-2013 à 12:24:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'aimerais une correction de mon devoir s'il vous plaît !
Merci pour vos réponses.
New Zealand :
I'm going to talk about the notion of locations and exchanges.
First of all i would like to give a definition of the notion. It's a the different spaces of the world are nowadays more and more connected to each other. The exchanges can appear on many forms: people, trade, information. To illustrate the notion, i have chosen three documents who present the New Zealand.
First we have a map with any extract. We can see that New Zealand is a country in Oceania, South-western Pacific Ocean comprising two main islands (the North Island and the South Island), and smaller islands. Located about 2000 km from Australia which it is separated by the Tasman Sea, New Zealand is geographically isolated. This isolation has allowed the development of flora and fauna endemic rich and varied, ranging from giant kauri weta insects and through the kaponga and kiwi, the latter two being symbols of the country.
We have different paragraph who represent the country in different point of view.
This country is represented by the Maori and Their Culture with tattoos and famous haka that we know thanks to rugby. The animal : the kiwi, this is New Zealand's national icon and unofficial national emblem. We know the country too with the cinema “the lord of the rings” or “the hobbit” where we see beautiful landscape includes vast moutains chains, steaming volcanoes and lush rainforests.
During the history of new zealand, there was an exchange of cultur like we can see with,,,
The second documents its a picture of the mural on the wall of a public building in Waipu ? North Island. We can see the Maori on the sea a new community who arrived.
Maori have always organized their lifes with in tribus who kept fighting each other to defend their territories and became a nation to kill their ennemies on this mural reminder of the past , this people just coming. We can imagine from this scene the clash between this two communities and if we refert to the N Z history the memory people have been constenbly fishing for a proximetly 2 centuries. Be a minority in the begining of 90's century there population was almost decimated.
Over the years, the country opens to the other countries,,,
The last document is « multicultural new zealand », this text show the advantages of living in New Zealand like dream of safe community, safe environment, good education for the kids, small population, lot of ressources and agriculture.
New Zealand's society is characterizing by the multiculturalism.
They try to live together because some ethnics can't accepted live together.
This place is very strategic because they are connected to Asia and they are touch by the anglo saxon society.
To conclued, i think the exchanges are very important to a country. The impact can be postiv or negativ but with exchanges you meeting people and discover other ideas.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-06-2013 12:28
Réponse: Correction /Nouvelle Zélande de samenglish, postée le 09-06-2013 à 21:35:25 (S | E)
I'm going to talk about the notion of locations and exchanges.
First of all i would like to give a definition of the notion.the different spaces of the world are nowadays more and more connected to each other. exchanges can appear in many forms: people, trade, information. To illustrate the notion, i have chosen three documents which (pour les chose, et who pour les personnes) are about ( on ne mets pas l'article defini devant un nom propre sauf si le nom est pluriel comme the USA, The Netherlands) New Zealand.
Réponse: Correction /Nouvelle Zélande de samenglish, postée le 09-06-2013 à 21:39:57 (S | E)
First we have a map with an extract. We can see that New Zealand is a country in Oceania, South-western Pacific Ocean comprising two main islands (the North Island and the South Island), and smaller islands. Located about 2000 km from Australia which it is separated by the Tasman Sea, New Zealand is geographically isolated. This isolation has allowed the development of flora and fauna endemic rich and varied, ranging from giant kauri weta insects and through the kaponga and kiwi, the latter two being symbols of the country.
We have different paragraphs which represent the country in different points of view.
This country is represented by the Maori and Their Culture with tattoos and famous haka that we know thanks to rugby. The animal : the kiwi, is New Zealand's national icon and the unofficial national emblem. We know the country too with the cinema “the lord of the rings” or “the hobbit” where we see beautiful landscape including vast moutain chains, steaming volcanoes and lush rainforests.
Réponse: Correction /Nouvelle Zélande de samenglish, postée le 09-06-2013 à 21:50:39 (S | E)
through the history of new zealand, there was an exchange of cultur like we can see with,,,
The second document is a picture of the mural on the wall of a public building in Waipu ? North Island. We can see the Maori on the sea a new community who arrived.
Maori have always organized their livesinto tribes who kept fighting each other to defend their territories and became a nation to kill their ennemies on this mural reminder of the past , these people just coming. We can imagine from this scene the clash between these two communities and if we refert to the N Z history the memory people have been constenbly fishing for a proximetly 2 centuries. Being a minority in the begining of 90's century there population was almost decimated.
Over the years, the country opens to the other countries,,,
The last document is « multicultural new zealand », this text shows the advantages of living in New Zealand soundslike dreaming of safe community, safe environment, good education for the kids, small population, lot of ressources and agriculture.
New Zealand's society is characterized by (sans the) multiculturalism.
They try to live together because some ethnic groups can't accepte to live together.
This place is very strategic because Itis connected to Asia and its people are influenced by the anglo saxon society.
To conclude, i think ( sans the) exchanges are very important to a country. Their impact can be postiv or negativ but with exchanges you can meet people and discover other ideas.
J'espere que ca vous aidera! Good Luck
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