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Message de besoinanglais posté le 30-05-2013 à 15:15:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde !
Je passe mes oraux en anglais lundi et je voudrais qu'on me corrige si c'est possible !
Merci d'avance !
Voilà mon texte :
I will introduce the notion of Space and exchange. Space is something extremely large thing. It can for example be a space in which we live. It can range from one piece to a country, it can also extend beyond the planet. The exchanges can appear on many forms: people, trade, information. I chose to speak more precisely travel because I think travel are part of the concept of space and exchanges. On the one hand, because we can travel to discover more spaces, places, countries. And on the other hand, they allow us to meet others who share their traditions, cultures with us. We may wonder if everyone can travel around the world?
We tend to think that travel is reserved only to people living in the Developed countries and we also think that this is only for people who have enough money to afford it.
It depends on the destination country and especially the country of origin. Nowadays, there is still a disparity between people living in different countries. We have a very well-known example, the US-Mexico border, the U.S. has the right to go to Mexico unlike Mexican who does not have the right. But it's the same for all underdeveloped countries. There is a reason for these inequalities. If there were no boundaries between developed and underdeveloped. The inhabitants of developing countries would move to less developed countries in order to live better lives.
Then, in order to afford to travel, you need a lot of money, because nowadays the trips are very expensive. You pay the transportation, housing and meals finally, and this can become very expensive.
However, we have heard a report called class audio. In reporting is meant to Mexicans who are trying to learn English in a laundry. They also explain that it is very difficult for them to find work because of the language barrier, and as he did not speak English too clever, it is also difficult to live in a country they do not know . They often live in slums. These illegal travelers risk their lives to come to the United States by hiding in the trains.
Finally, we saw in class an excerpt from the movie "Into the wild", that Alex is strictly necessary for travel, it even burns his money and began the famous travel without money.
In conclusion, despite the measures taken by the State that do not cross the Mexican border illegally, some get there and are often disappointed by what we can call the American dream. Then, as we saw in the movie into the wild, we can afford to travel even if we have no money.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-05-2013 15:36
Message de besoinanglais posté le 30-05-2013 à 15:15:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde !
Je passe mes oraux en anglais lundi et je voudrais qu'on me corrige si c'est possible !
Merci d'avance !
Voilà mon texte :
I will introduce the notion of Space and exchange. Space is something extremely large thing. It can for example be a space in which we live. It can range from one piece to a country, it can also extend beyond the planet. The exchanges can appear on many forms: people, trade, information. I chose to speak more precisely travel because I think travel are part of the concept of space and exchanges. On the one hand, because we can travel to discover more spaces, places, countries. And on the other hand, they allow us to meet others who share their traditions, cultures with us. We may wonder if everyone can travel around the world?
We tend to think that travel is reserved only to people living in the Developed countries and we also think that this is only for people who have enough money to afford it.
It depends on the destination country and especially the country of origin. Nowadays, there is still a disparity between people living in different countries. We have a very well-known example, the US-Mexico border, the U.S. has the right to go to Mexico unlike Mexican who does not have the right. But it's the same for all underdeveloped countries. There is a reason for these inequalities. If there were no boundaries between developed and underdeveloped. The inhabitants of developing countries would move to less developed countries in order to live better lives.
Then, in order to afford to travel, you need a lot of money, because nowadays the trips are very expensive. You pay the transportation, housing and meals finally, and this can become very expensive.
However, we have heard a report called class audio. In reporting is meant to Mexicans who are trying to learn English in a laundry. They also explain that it is very difficult for them to find work because of the language barrier, and as he did not speak English too clever, it is also difficult to live in a country they do not know . They often live in slums. These illegal travelers risk their lives to come to the United States by hiding in the trains.
Finally, we saw in class an excerpt from the movie "Into the wild", that Alex is strictly necessary for travel, it even burns his money and began the famous travel without money.
In conclusion, despite the measures taken by the State that do not cross the Mexican border illegally, some get there and are often disappointed by what we can call the American dream. Then, as we saw in the movie into the wild, we can afford to travel even if we have no money.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-05-2013 15:36
Réponse: Oral/aide 1er texte de besoinanglais, postée le 01-06-2013 à 11:38:27 (S | E)
Aidez moi , s'il vous plaît :'( !
Réponse: Oral/aide 1er texte de hushpuppy, postée le 01-06-2013 à 16:10:25 (S | E)
Bonjour
Il y a des corrections en bleu et des conseils en vert :
I will introduce the notion of Space and exchange. Space is something extremely large
We tend to think that travel is reserved only to(autre préposition) people living in the developed countries and we also think that this is only for people who have enough money to afford it.
It depends on the destination country and especially the country of origin. Nowadays, there is still a disparity between people living in different countries. We have a very well-known example, the US-Mexican border, the U.S. has the right to go to Mexico unlike Mexican(pluriel) who does(3ème personne pluriel) not have the right. But it's the same for all underdeveloped countries. There is a reason for these inequalities. If there were no boundaries between developed and underdeveloped countries, the inhabitants of developing countries would move to less developed
countries in order to live better lives.Then, in order to afford travel, you need a lot of money, because nowadays the trips are very expensive. You pay the transportation, housing and meals
However, we have heard a report called class audio. In reporting is meant to Mexicans who are trying to learn English in a laundry.(maladroit, j'ai du mal à comprendre le sens de la phrase entière) They also explain that it is very difficult for them to find work because of the language barrier, and if someone does not speak English very well, it is also difficult to live in a country they do not know . They often live in slums. These illegal travelers risk their lives to come to the United States by hiding in the trains.
Finally, we saw in class an excerpt from the movie "Into the wild", that Alex
is strictly necessary for travel, it even burns his money and began the famous travel without money.(maladroit, c'est très bizarre. Qui ou quoi est "it" ? Pourquoi qu'"it" as brulé son sous ? Pourquoi la phrase change du présent au passé ? Comment peut une personne être "strictly necessary for travel" ?)In conclusion, despite the measures taken by the State that (qui?) do not cross the Mexican border illegally, some get there and are often disappointed by what we can call the American dream. Then, as we saw in the movie "into the wild", we can afford to travel even if we have no money.
Réponse: Oral/aide 1er texte de besoinanglais, postée le 01-06-2013 à 18:50:44 (S | E)
Bonjour ! Je vous remercie énormément pour votre réponse , par contre je n'ai pas compris ce que signifie les points d'interrogations et aussi conjonction! Pourriez-vous m'expliquer ! Merci encore !
Réponse: Oral/aide 1er texte de hushpuppy, postée le 01-06-2013 à 20:02:20 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Les conjonctions : and, but, if, etc.
Les
s signifie que je n'ai pas vu leur signifiance ou raisonnement. Par exemple : "less developed" Pour quelle raison une personne déplacera-t-elle d'un pays en train de développement à un pays moins développé. Cela me semble être l'opposite, non ? Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais
