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Message de a03 posté le 14-10-2012 à 20:40:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider pour mon sujet d'anglais :
" Discuss the following quotation : " We have more media than ever and more technology in our lives. It's supposed to helps us communicate, but it has the opposite effect of isolating us".
J'aimerais savoir si vous y voyez des fautes d'orthographe, de grammaire ou quoi que ce soit.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Ce sujet est a produire a l'oral, et voici ma rédaction :
On the one hand, the quotation by Tracy Chapman is true because a lots of people don't going out for buy a newspaper and they stay in font of the tv every day. If they don't watch tv, they are keep in touch and communicate virtually. Eventually when two people are face to face, they have nothing to say. Isolation concern(s?) as well children because of online games. They don't play outside with their friends !
One the other hand, thanks to new technology, we can be quickly aware of a celebration that will produce nearby. Media report (s?) events that happen in the world. Without them, the informations wouldn't pass because we are unable to go in the field. But many informations are leak. Therefore the freedom of expression is not total.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-10-2012 20:46
Message de a03 posté le 14-10-2012 à 20:40:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider pour mon sujet d'anglais :
" Discuss the following quotation : " We have more media than ever and more technology in our lives. It's supposed to helps us communicate, but it has the opposite effect of isolating us".
J'aimerais savoir si vous y voyez des fautes d'orthographe, de grammaire ou quoi que ce soit.
Merci pour vos réponses.
Ce sujet est a produire a l'oral, et voici ma rédaction :
On the one hand, the quotation by Tracy Chapman is true because a lots of people don't going out for buy a newspaper and they stay in font of the tv every day. If they don't watch tv, they are keep in touch and communicate virtually. Eventually when two people are face to face, they have nothing to say. Isolation concern(s?) as well children because of online games. They don't play outside with their friends !
One the other hand, thanks to new technology, we can be quickly aware of a celebration that will produce nearby. Media report (s?) events that happen in the world. Without them, the informations wouldn't pass because we are unable to go in the field. But many informations are leak. Therefore the freedom of expression is not total.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-10-2012 20:46
Réponse: Correction/more media de gerondif, postée le 14-10-2012 à 21:03:24 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
cela ressemble à du français traduit mot-à-mot:
Discuss the following quotation : " We have more media than ever and more technology in our lives. It's supposed to helps us communicate, but it has the opposite effect of isolating us".
On the one hand, the quotation by Tracy Chapman is true because a lots of people don't going out(conjugaison très fausse!!) for(mauvais mot pour dire pour + verbe) buy a newspaper and they stay in front of the tv set every day. If they don't watch tv, they are(en trop) keep in touch and communicate virtually. Eventually when two people are face to face, they have nothing to say. Isolation concern(s?)(oui, il faut un s en troisième personne du présent simple) children as well because of online games. They don't play outside with their friends !
One the other hand, thanks to new technology, we can be quickly aware of a celebration that will produce (français traduit, se produire, arriver, avoir lieu :......)nearby. Media report (s?) events that happen in the world. Without them, the informations wouldn't pass because we are unable to go in the field français traduit, l'information ne passera pas car nous sommes incapables d'aller sur le terrain, ok mais en anglais, cela ne veut pas dire grand chose. information est un mot collectif, singulier à sens pluriel comme en français le mobilier ou la chevelure). But many informations are leaks . Therefore the freedom of expression is not total.
(Quel rapport entre des "fuites" et la liberté d'expression?)
Réponse: Correction/more media de a03, postée le 28-10-2012 à 22:26:28 (S | E)
merci beaucoup !
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