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Message de yvan96 posté le 14-10-2012 à 10:30:44 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Pouvez-vous m'aider et me dire s'il y a des fautes dans ma rédactionsvp s'il vous plaît?
CARTOON
Our document is a cartoon, it comes from the website www.expresso.pt. It was published the 6th of july 2006 and the cartoonist is Rodrigo. The cartoon is composed of 2 rooms, there are 2 children i and an adult. There are two bubbles, one for the child with the cap where it's written « Great stuff I've been discovering since I decided to leave facebook » and in the other man's bubble, it's written « How cool ! How do you turn it on ? ».
In the foreground, we can see the two children , a child with a cap and an other child with glasses.
In the background, behind the door, we can see the adult who is in front of his computer, he's probably on Facebook.
The eyes of the child with the cap are irrated, and the three persons look like very very stupids. Moreover, the adult is brain less in front of his computer and he smiles stupidly.
We can say that the child with the cat just leaves a social network like facebook because of his eyes. He found an item that he doesn't know, in fact, it's a soccer ball. The other child is also an addict because he asks how does the soccer ball works. He thinks the ball is an electronic object.
In our opinions, the cartoonist wants to suggest that nowdays, all the persons from different ages are more and more deconnected to the real life because of social network.
Lien du cartoon: Lien internet
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-10-2012 11:31
Message de yvan96 posté le 14-10-2012 à 10:30:44 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Pouvez-vous m'aider et me dire s'il y a des fautes dans ma rédaction
CARTOON
Our document is a cartoon, it comes from the website www.expresso.pt. It was published the 6th of july 2006 and the cartoonist is Rodrigo. The cartoon is composed of 2 rooms, there are 2 children i and an adult. There are two bubbles, one for the child with the cap where it's written « Great stuff I've been discovering since I decided to leave facebook » and in the other man's bubble, it's written « How cool ! How do you turn it on ? ».
In the foreground, we can see the two children , a child with a cap and an other child with glasses.
In the background, behind the door, we can see the adult who is in front of his computer, he's probably on Facebook.
The eyes of the child with the cap are irrated, and the three persons look like very very stupids. Moreover, the adult is brain less in front of his computer and he smiles stupidly.
We can say that the child with the cat just leaves a social network like facebook because of his eyes. He found an item that he doesn't know, in fact, it's a soccer ball. The other child is also an addict because he asks how does the soccer ball works. He thinks the ball is an electronic object.
In our opinions, the cartoonist wants to suggest that nowdays, all the persons from different ages are more and more deconnected to the real life because of social network.
Lien du cartoon: Lien internet
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-10-2012 11:31
Réponse: Correction /cartoon de sherry48, postée le 15-10-2012 à 04:36:09 (S | E)
Hello.
...july 2006 and the cartoonist is Rodrigo. The cartoon is composed of 2 rooms, there are 2 children i and an adult. There are two bubbles, one for the child with the cap where it's written « Great stuff I've been discovering since I decided to leave facebook » and in the other man's
bubble, it's written « How cool ! How do you turn it on ? ».In the foreground, we can see the two children , a child with a cap and an other child with glasses.
In the background, behind the door, we can see the adult who is in front of his computer, he's probably on Facebook.
The eyes of the child with the cap are irrated
, and the three persons look like very very stupids. Moreover, the adult is brain less in front of his computer and he smiles stupidly.We can say that the child with the cat just leaves a social network like facebook because of his eyes. He found an item that he doesn't know, in fact, it's a soccer ball. The other child is also an addict because he asks how does the soccer ball works. He thinks the ball is an electronic object.
In our? opinions, the cartoonist wants to suggest that nowdays, all the persons from different ages are more and more deconnected to the real life because of social networking.
There aren't many major errors. Sherry
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