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Biographie/ Jean Dujardin
Message de samuelbg4 posté le 01-03-2012 à 17:13:57 (S | E | F)
salut Bonjour,
je dois présenter mon acteur favori en cours d'anglais; pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Hello, let me introduce you my favorite actor whose name is Jean DUJARDIN.
He was born on the 19 of June 1972 In Rueil-Malmaison .After his studies, he became Locksmith . In 1994 he forms a humorous group “LA bande du carré Blanc “ ,then it becomes in 1998 “Nous C Nous” They win three times “Graine de Stars” on M6
In October 1999 He acts in “UN Gars une FIlle “with Alexandra Lamy who will become his wife.
In 2004 his first success in cinema, was “Mariages” then he became a famous actor, he made” Brice De Nice “it’s an adaptation of one of his sketch with Nous C Nous .
In 2007 he won a César of the best actor following his performance in OSS 117 “LE Caire Nid d’espion” The second part” OSS 117 Rio ne répond plus “came out in 2009.
In 2011 he stars in the artist with Bérénice Bejot and this year in win the Oscar of the best actor .
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-03-2012 18:00
Message de samuelbg4 posté le 01-03-2012 à 17:13:57 (S | E | F)
je dois présenter mon acteur favori en cours d'anglais; pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Hello, let me introduce you my favorite actor whose name is Jean DUJARDIN.
He was born on the 19 of June 1972 In Rueil-Malmaison .After his studies, he became Locksmith . In 1994 he forms a humorous group “LA bande du carré Blanc “ ,then it becomes in 1998 “Nous C Nous” They win three times “Graine de Stars” on M6
In October 1999 He acts in “UN Gars une FIlle “with Alexandra Lamy who will become his wife.
In 2004 his first success in cinema, was “Mariages” then he became a famous actor, he made” Brice De Nice “it’s an adaptation of one of his sketch with Nous C Nous .
In 2007 he won a César of the best actor following his performance in OSS 117 “LE Caire Nid d’espion” The second part” OSS 117 Rio ne répond plus “came out in 2009.
In 2011 he stars in the artist with Bérénice Bejot and this year in win the Oscar of the best actor .
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-03-2012 18:00
Réponse: Biographie/ Jean Dujardin de sherry48, postée le 01-03-2012 à 21:43:51 (S | E)
Hello samuelbg4.
Your main problem is with verb tense...all of these events happened in the past. I did not correct all punctuation errors.
Hello, let me introduce you * (preposition) my favorite actor whose name is Jean DUJARDIN.
He was born on the 19 of June (if you keep 'the', you will need an ordinal number)1972 In Rueil-Malmaison .After his studies, he became * Locksmith . In 1994 he forms a humorous group “LA bande du carré Blanc “ ,then it becomes in 1998 “Nous C Nous” They win three times (wrong place) * “Graine de Stars” on M6
In October 1999, He acts in “UN Gars une FIlle “with Alexandra Lamy who will become his wife.
In 2004 his first success in * cinema, was “Mariages”. then he became a famous actor. he made” Brice De Nice “it’s an adaptation of one of his sketch with Nous C Nous .
In 2007 he won a César of (different preposition) the best actor following his performance in OSS 117 “LE Caire Nid d’espion” The second part,” OSS 117 Rio ne répond plus “came out in 2009.
In 2011 he stars in the artist with Bérénice Bejot and this year
Sherry
Réponse: Biographie/ Jean Dujardin de samuelbg4, postée le 02-03-2012 à 00:47:15 (S | E)
thank you for your answer but is the style good ?
merci de votre réponse mais sinon le style de l'écriture est bien ?
Samuel .
Réponse: Biographie/ Jean Dujardin de sherry48, postée le 03-03-2012 à 17:26:06 (S | E)
Hello samuelbg4.
The style seems OK, but that depends on the instructions given, doesn't it? For example, is it long enough, have you met all the requirements of the assignment, etc. Sherry
Réponse: Biographie/ Jean Dujardin de samuelbg4, postée le 04-03-2012 à 23:17:44 (S | E)
yes I think so ,
I have just to write a biography about my favourite actor,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-03-2012 23:21
Réponse: Biographie/ Jean Dujardin de violet91, postée le 05-03-2012 à 12:13:01 (S | E)
Hello , samuel...,Déjà , Dujardin sur le site et en classe ? Well done !
Le présent de narration n'est quasiment pas employé en anglais .
Il faut tout passer au simple past ( prétérit) sauf ce qui concerne A.Lamy et leur vie actuelle .
Si la consigne ne demande pas d'atteindre un seuil de mots , tout me semble bien construit . Mais il faudrait dire pourquoi cet acteur, populaire et sympathique, est en pleine ascension et surtout ce qui en fait votre favori . Pourquoi , par exemple , il touche tant de monde en France , en GB, aux US dans " The artist ".( là, il faudrait employer des présents simples( 3e sg avec 's' ou 'es' !) , car généralités ou " vérités universelles" ).
A suivre et bonne journée .
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