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Message de etudiantemotive posté le 12-11-2011 à 23:34:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai deux textes à faire en anglais. Je ne suis pas très forte mais j'ai essayé de faire au mieux .
Est-ce que vous voyez des formulations incompréhensibles s'il vous plaît?
Merci par avance.
Cordialement.
3-Good evening my dear viewers, I think it’s really important now to give you data to take stock of the actual alarming situation. Do you know that many areas are concerned by this environmental degradation? Thus , sea’s areas are affected by an impressing marine crisis , for example in North Atlantic cod stocks have collapsed from an estimated 264,000 tonnes in 1970 to under 60,000 in 1995.It’s the same for the forest’s area which between 1970 and 2002 forest cover has dwindled by 12 per cent. We can highlight endangered wildlife too. For instance, African elephant numbers have fallen from 1.2 million in 1980 to half a million new. We realize that it takes 12.2 hectares of land to support each American citizen and 6.29 for each Britain while the figure for Burundi’s country is just half a hectare. Recently, a spokesman for WWF UK said “If all the people consumed natural resources at the same rate as the average US and UK citizen we would require at least two extra planets like Earth. «It’s why it is imperative to realize that we can’t continue the race for growth because it leads to planet’s self-destruction. To finish, I want to insist that a scientific report revealed that more than third of the natural world has been destroyed by humans over the past three decades.
8-We have to attend typical and recurrent debate of the moment. As I have already to demonstrate with figures , it is undeniable that things have to change. So, the human activity has impact at various levels. For example, the greenhouse effect which is one of first causes of global warming causes hurricanes because of the evaporation of waters. This global warming have also an impact on the cast iron of waters which is going to make go back up the level of waters. We can notice that all these elements make important human damages. That’s why we can arrive at the conclusion that the human activity kills slowly the human race. For that purpose, I can only recommend in each to adopt small simple eco-friendly gesture every day to slow down the process of ageing of the planet. . Knowing that the human activity accelerated the rhythm of extinction, which is one hundred times upper at least to the natural rhythm of extinction today, there are only eco-friendly gestures’ sum as efficient solution. Thus, for instance less to pollute, to make the sorting of the waste, pay attention on the resources as the water or the electricity which can be efficient at the world level.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-11-2011 07:16
Message de etudiantemotive posté le 12-11-2011 à 23:34:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai deux textes à faire en anglais. Je ne suis pas très forte mais j'ai essayé de faire au mieux .
Est-ce que vous voyez des formulations incompréhensibles s'il vous plaît?
Merci par avance.
Cordialement.
3-Good evening my dear viewers, I think it’s really important now to give you data to take stock of the actual alarming situation. Do you know that many areas are concerned by this environmental degradation? Thus , sea’s areas are affected by an impressing marine crisis , for example in North Atlantic cod stocks have collapsed from an estimated 264,000 tonnes in 1970 to under 60,000 in 1995.It’s the same for the forest’s area which between 1970 and 2002 forest cover has dwindled by 12 per cent. We can highlight endangered wildlife too. For instance, African elephant numbers have fallen from 1.2 million in 1980 to half a million new. We realize that it takes 12.2 hectares of land to support each American citizen and 6.29 for each Britain while the figure for Burundi’s country is just half a hectare. Recently, a spokesman for WWF UK said “If all the people consumed natural resources at the same rate as the average US and UK citizen we would require at least two extra planets like Earth. «It’s why it is imperative to realize that we can’t continue the race for growth because it leads to planet’s self-destruction. To finish, I want to insist that a scientific report revealed that more than third of the natural world has been destroyed by humans over the past three decades.
8-We have to attend typical and recurrent debate of the moment. As I have already to demonstrate with figures , it is undeniable that things have to change. So, the human activity has impact at various levels. For example, the greenhouse effect which is one of first causes of global warming causes hurricanes because of the evaporation of waters. This global warming have also an impact on the cast iron of waters which is going to make go back up the level of waters. We can notice that all these elements make important human damages. That’s why we can arrive at the conclusion that the human activity kills slowly the human race. For that purpose, I can only recommend in each to adopt small simple eco-friendly gesture every day to slow down the process of ageing of the planet. . Knowing that the human activity accelerated the rhythm of extinction, which is one hundred times upper at least to the natural rhythm of extinction today, there are only eco-friendly gestures’ sum as efficient solution. Thus, for instance less to pollute, to make the sorting of the waste, pay attention on the resources as the water or the electricity which can be efficient at the world level.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-11-2011 07:16
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