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Message de samro posté le 25-09-2011 à 16:43:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte suivant s'il vous plaît?
Je dois répondre à la question suivante :
Would you like to go and live in another country ? Why ? Why not ?
When i grow up, i would like to live in another country because it's very important to discover the world. In another country i can learn a language because i meet a lot of peoples, these peoples live with diferents cultures and diferents religions. When i visit the city, i can speak with inhabitants about monuments. When i live in another country, i have to eat, sometimes i can go to restaurants and i taste speciality of the country. However going to a country can be drawback because i don't liwe next to my family, i leave my friends and i don't practise my sport. I don't leave my country because i'm feel very well, and i don't know perfectly my country and i have lot of place to visit before to quit my hometown. In conclusion i would like go in another country for hollidays but not all the time.
Thank you.
See you !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-09-2011 00:20
Message de samro posté le 25-09-2011 à 16:43:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger ce texte suivant s'il vous plaît?
Je dois répondre à la question suivante :
Would you like to go and live in another country ? Why ? Why not ?
When i grow up, i would like to live in another country because it's very important to discover the world. In another country i can learn a language because i meet a lot of peoples, these peoples live with diferents cultures and diferents religions. When i visit the city, i can speak with inhabitants about monuments. When i live in another country, i have to eat, sometimes i can go to restaurants and i taste speciality of the country. However going to a country can be drawback because i don't liwe next to my family, i leave my friends and i don't practise my sport. I don't leave my country because i'm feel very well, and i don't know perfectly my country and i have lot of place to visit before to quit my hometown. In conclusion i would like go in another country for hollidays but not all the time.
Thank you.
See you !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-09-2011 00:20
Réponse: Rédaction/live abroad de headway, postée le 25-09-2011 à 17:07:09 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Quelques fautes relevées par-ci par-là:
"When i grow up, i would like to live in another country because it's very important to discover the world. In another country i can learn a language because i meet a lot of peoples, these peoples live with diferents cultures and diferents religions. When i visit the city, i can speak with inhabitants about monuments. When i live in another country, i have to eat, sometimes i can go to restaurants and i taste speciality of the country. However going to a country can be drawback because i don't liwe next to my family, i leave my friends and i don't practise my sport. I don't leave my country because i'm feel very well, and i don't know perfectly my country and i have lot of place to visit before to quit my hometown. In conclusion i would like go in another country for hollidays but not all the time."
-'Je' s'écrit toujours en majuscule.
-'discover the world': je préfère: ... to broaden one's horizons.
- people, est déjà au pluriel, inutile d'ajouter un 's'.
- Different: 2 'f', sans 's'.
- speciality: je mettrais au pluriel, précédé d'un article défini.
- I'm feel: I am well/ I feel well.
- a lot of places.
- ... before to quit.
- hollidays.
Cordialement.
Headway.
Réponse: Rédaction/live abroad de samro, postée le 25-09-2011 à 20:47:55 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup
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