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Message de cedricc posté le 07-11-2010 à 18:06:44 (S | E | F)
Bonjour Bonjour,
Voila, demain je dois rendre une rédaction sur les choses positives et négatives du monde d'aujourd'hui (pour faire simple). Et comme mon anglais n'est pas très avancé, j'aurais aimé que quelqu'un m'aide à corriger les fautes ;)
Voici mon texte :
Nowadays, with globalization, the world knows much change.
So, we can ask us if our life is better than that of our grandparents or great-grandparents?
To answer this question, we will divide our analysis into two parts: First, we will see how the world changed positively and after how it changed negatively.
We are going to see the positive changes on the world of today.
In the first place, we notice that the living conditions are better than in the past. Indeed, more and more people access to the care and education. Moreover, today, we have tap cater and electricity (for the television or the shower for example).
In the second place, we note that the means of communication are very diversified. We can take the example of Internet. It is a real revolution because it permitted to communicate with people of end of the world. Besides, Internet contains many information, we inform ourselves and the pupils can have helps for the school. Then, employees can relax themselves after a long day's work.
In the last place, we see that the globalization supported tourism and the exchanges because the borders opened. So, more and more people can travel and the consumers have more choice in the stores.
Now, we are going to study the negatives changes on the world.
Firstly, we realize that the medical progress can be frightening. To illustrate my point, we can speak about the cloning which is very dangerous for the humanity.
Secondly, we can also speak about scientific progress. Indeed, even if it helps us to have better living conditions, it makes pollution and greenhouse effect. It remind me of the black sea in Gulf of Mexico for example.
Finally, we can notice the economic crisis’ effect which is present all over the world. In rich countries, there are many dismissals and in the poor countries the living conditions are very weak in comparison.
As a conclusion, We can say that the world’s changes aren’t always positives. So, it’s necessary to act.
Merci d'avance
Cedric.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-11-2010 18:21
Message de cedricc posté le 07-11-2010 à 18:06:44 (S | E | F)
Bonjour Bonjour,
Voici mon texte :
Nowadays, with globalization, the world knows much change.
So, we can ask us if our life is better than that of our grandparents or great-grandparents?
To answer this question, we will divide our analysis into two parts: First, we will see how the world changed positively and after how it changed negatively.
We are going to see the positive changes on the world of today.
In the first place, we notice that the living conditions are better than in the past. Indeed, more and more people access to the care and education. Moreover, today, we have tap cater and electricity (for the television or the shower for example).
In the second place, we note that the means of communication are very diversified. We can take the example of Internet. It is a real revolution because it permitted to communicate with people of end of the world. Besides, Internet contains many information, we inform ourselves and the pupils can have helps for the school. Then, employees can relax themselves after a long day's work.
In the last place, we see that the globalization supported tourism and the exchanges because the borders opened. So, more and more people can travel and the consumers have more choice in the stores.
Now, we are going to study the negatives changes on the world.
Firstly, we realize that the medical progress can be frightening. To illustrate my point, we can speak about the cloning which is very dangerous for the humanity.
Secondly, we can also speak about scientific progress. Indeed, even if it helps us to have better living conditions, it makes pollution and greenhouse effect. It remind me of the black sea in Gulf of Mexico for example.
Finally, we can notice the economic crisis’ effect which is present all over the world. In rich countries, there are many dismissals and in the poor countries the living conditions are very weak in comparison.
As a conclusion, We can say that the world’s changes aren’t always positives. So, it’s necessary to act.
Merci d'avance
Cedric.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-11-2010 18:21
Réponse: Besoin d'aide/Globalization de cedricc, postée le 07-11-2010 à 19:40:34 (S | E)
Personne n'a le courage de tous lire ?
Réponse: Besoin d'aide/Globalization de vendetta1993, postée le 10-11-2010 à 21:04:49 (S | E)
Salut Cédric,
Je ne suis d'élève mais je vais essayer de t'aider, faute d'une aide plus experte
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To answer this question, we will divide our analysis into two parts: First, we will see how the world changed positively and after then how it changed negatively.
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In the first place, we notice that the living conditions are better than in the past. Indeed, more and more people access to the care and education. Moreover, today, we have tap cater and electricity (for the television or the shower for example).
In the second place, we note that the means of communication are very diversified. We can take the example of Internet. It is a real revolution because it permitted It has permitted to communicate with people of end of the world. Besides, Internet contains many information, we inform ourselves and the pupils can have helps sans sfor the school. Then, employees can relax themselves after a long day's work a long day of work.
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Now, we are going to study the negatives pas de S dans les adj changes on the world.
Firstly, we realize that the medical progress can be frightening. To illustrate my point, we can speak about the cloning which is very dangerous for the humanity.
Secondly, we can also speak about scientific progress. Indeed, even if it helps us to have better living conditions, it makes it lead to, make en tout, ça ne le fait pas pollution and greenhouse effect. It remind me of the black sea in Gulf of Mexico for example.
Finally, we can notice the economic crisis’ effect the effect of the economical crisis which is present that are ... et pas present, trouve un autre mot, genre la traduction de palpable all over the world. In rich countries, there are many dismissals and in the poor countries the living conditions are very weak in comparison.
As a conclusion, We can say that the world’s changes aren’t always positives. So, it’s necessary to act.
Voilà, c'est tout ce que je peux faire. Maintenant, bien sur, je ne te garantis rien!
Salut;
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