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Message de heros posté le 30-09-2010 à 23:58:10 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
S'il vous plait jeveux voudrais que vous m'aidiez à corriger ce texte !
My school is like all other schools in our city , I've been here one year .
In fact , I like the school organization and cleanliness , but I don't like the cameras in the school because its make us feel imprisoned .
Usually , I find the homework easy to solve , so I do it by myself because I have nearly 12 teachers they make me understand anything.
All my teachers are great and I appreciate them but it can't means that you can ignore the rules like use the mobile phones at school .
There are some other rules like discipline in the classroom and come to school in the correct time .
There are many other things in our school like multimedia room and library but I don't have the time to enter because I'm very busy , I study about seven subjects per day .
Merci beaucoup !!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-10-2010 07:54
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Message de heros posté le 30-09-2010 à 23:58:10 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
S'il vous plait je
My school is like all other schools in our city , I've been here one year .
In fact , I like the school organization and cleanliness , but I don't like the cameras in the school because its make us feel imprisoned .
Usually , I find the homework easy to solve , so I do it by myself because I have nearly 12 teachers they make me understand anything.
All my teachers are great and I appreciate them but it can't means that you can ignore the rules like use the mobile phones at school .
There are some other rules like discipline in the classroom and come to school in the correct time .
There are many other things in our school like multimedia room and library but I don't have the time to enter because I'm very busy , I study about seven subjects per day .
Merci beaucoup !!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-10-2010 07:54
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Réponse: Correction /My school de notrepere, postée le 01-10-2010 à 00:15:21 (S | E)
Bonjour!Bon travail.
My school is like all other schools in our city , [mauvaise ponctuation: point (.) ou point-virgule (;) I've been here one year.
In fact, I like the school [en forme possessive] organization and cleanliness, but I don't like the cameras in the school because its [pas de 's'] make [accorde] us feel imprisoned.
[Pas d'espace avant toute la ponctuation]
Usually , I find the homework easy to solve , so I do it by myself because I have nearly 12 teachers they make me understand anything [mal dit].
All my teachers are great and I appreciate them but it can't [utiliser 'do' mais accorde avec 'it'] means [accorde] that you can ignore the rules like use [en forme 'ing'] the mobile phones at school .
There are some other rules like discipline in the classroom and come [en forme 'ing'] to school in [mauvaise préposition] the correct time .
There are many other things in our school like [article manquant] multimedia room and library but I don't have the time to enter because I'm very busy , [mauvaise ponctuation: point ou point-virgule]I study about seven subjects per day .
Amicalement
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Modifié par notrepere le 01-10-2010 00:15
Réponse: Correction /My school de gerondif, postée le 01-10-2010 à 00:20:01 (S | E)
Hello,
"enter" is not a very common verb, "go in" or "go there" would be more usual
to attend, meaning, assister, prendre part, could also be useful.
Réponse: Correction /My school de heros, postée le 01-10-2010 à 00:54:01 (S | E)
Bonjour, et merci beaucoup
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-10-2010 07:56
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