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Défauts de grammaire/watch TV
Message de redboots posté le 10-01-2010 à 10:17:58 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
pourriez-vous m'aider à démasquer mes fautes dans ces phrases s'il-vous-plait:
- If not, why a couple of people would have choised to not have any TV deliberately ?
-We waste a lot of time in watching programmes without noticed it. As some Tv series are really close to the reality and related an american teenager's life, that young could dream of.
-People search especially the more entertaining programms, and finally beggin to go away from the reality and from the real relationship with parents, friends..
-These facts are related to the (everyday acceptance or banalizing ?) of the violence in Tv and video games. People sometimes badly react to the message spreaded by these medias, and these medias don't care about their possible and occasional effects on the audience.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-01-2010 10:36
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Message de redboots posté le 10-01-2010 à 10:17:58 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
pourriez-vous m'aider à démasquer mes fautes dans ces phrases s'il-vous-plait:
- If not, why a couple of people would have choised to not have any TV deliberately ?
-We waste a lot of time in watching programmes without noticed it. As some Tv series are really close to the reality and related an american teenager's life, that young could dream of.
-People search especially the more entertaining programms, and finally beggin to go away from the reality and from the real relationship with parents, friends..
-These facts are related to the (everyday acceptance or banalizing ?) of the violence in Tv and video games. People sometimes badly react to the message spreaded by these medias, and these medias don't care about their possible and occasional effects on the audience.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-01-2010 10:36
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Réponse: Défauts de grammaire/watch TV de seb06000, postée le 10-01-2010 à 10:53:00 (S | E)
bonjour,
je vous indique ce qu'il faut améliorer:
"If not, why a couple of people would have choised( conj) to( la préposition se place après la négation) not have any TV deliberately ?
-We waste a lot of time in(préposition inutile) watching programmes without noticed( la forme en ED ne marche pas ici) it. As some Tv series are really close to the( article inutile= reality= concept) reality and related ( il manque une préposition) an american( majuscule obligatoire pour la nationalité) teenager's life, that young could dream of.
-People search especially the more( expression du superlatif, ici c'est un comparatif de supériorité) entertaining programms (orth) , and finally beggin (orth) to go away from the reality and from the real relationship with parents, friends..
-These facts are related to the (everyday acceptance or banalizing ?) of the (article inutile devant un concept) violence in Tv and video games. People sometimes badly react to the message spreaded( voc) by these medias, and these medias don't care about their possible and occasional effects on the audience.
Voilà!
Amicalement
sébastien
Réponse: Défauts de grammaire/watch TV de redboots, postée le 10-01-2010 à 11:01:06 (S | E)
merci !!
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