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Message de emii3108 posté le 01-12-2009 à 21:13:44 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous,
J'ai 3 petits résumés sur des articles anglais qui pourraient contenir quelques fautes sachant que je ne suis pas experte du tout pour la langue anglaise.
Si quelques personnes d'entre vous aurez l'amabilité d'y jetter un oeil, cela serait très sympa de votre part.
1) Summary of the poem:
Yesterday, I read a poem in the ad Harley Davidson. Near the poem, there was a picture with a oldman with few wrinkles. Into the poem, I understood that the boy did a come back in his life. The boy said if he had his life to live over, he had try to make more mistakes, he would be relax, he would be do more trips… In fact, he would like to do everything all that he likes and he would live every moment after another.
2) Summary of the text:
Last week, I saw an text who spoke about the Berlin Wall. It had been erected in 1961 on the orders of East Germany’s former leader stop people leaving for West Germany. The wall and the other fortifications along 860 miles border shared by East and West Germany. The people attempting to escape have been shot dead by border guards.
The first indication that change was imminent came earlier today when Est Berlin’s Communist party spoken announced East Germans would be allowed to travel directly to West Germany.The Berlin Wall has been breached after nearly threee decades keeping East and West Berliners apart. On 1989 : Berliners celebrated the fall of the wall.
3) Summary of the text:
It's a woman who had a problem with age. It begun when she celebrated her fortieth birthday. She slowly got over the shock and tried to convince herself that life begins at 40. She met a man who playing badminton. He has 31 but he looks about 19. He had no idea how old she had. During her life , she had been totally honest but in the relationship, she lies about her job and years. If she had been brave enought to admit that she was 11 years older than him, she wouldn't been in the crazy situation. According to her, 11 years difference is nothing for a man but for a woman, it's difficult. In fact, ageism turned her into a liar.
Merci d'avance.
Emilie.
Message de emii3108 posté le 01-12-2009 à 21:13:44 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous,
J'ai 3 petits résumés sur des articles anglais qui pourraient contenir quelques fautes sachant que je ne suis pas experte du tout pour la langue anglaise.
Si quelques personnes d'entre vous aurez l'amabilité d'y jetter un oeil, cela serait très sympa de votre part.
1) Summary of the poem:
Yesterday, I read a poem in the ad Harley Davidson. Near the poem, there was a picture with a oldman with few wrinkles. Into the poem, I understood that the boy did a come back in his life. The boy said if he had his life to live over, he had try to make more mistakes, he would be relax, he would be do more trips… In fact, he would like to do everything all that he likes and he would live every moment after another.
2) Summary of the text:
Last week, I saw an text who spoke about the Berlin Wall. It had been erected in 1961 on the orders of East Germany’s former leader stop people leaving for West Germany. The wall and the other fortifications along 860 miles border shared by East and West Germany. The people attempting to escape have been shot dead by border guards.
The first indication that change was imminent came earlier today when Est Berlin’s Communist party spoken announced East Germans would be allowed to travel directly to West Germany.The Berlin Wall has been breached after nearly threee decades keeping East and West Berliners apart. On 1989 : Berliners celebrated the fall of the wall.
3) Summary of the text:
It's a woman who had a problem with age. It begun when she celebrated her fortieth birthday. She slowly got over the shock and tried to convince herself that life begins at 40. She met a man who playing badminton. He has 31 but he looks about 19. He had no idea how old she had. During her life , she had been totally honest but in the relationship, she lies about her job and years. If she had been brave enought to admit that she was 11 years older than him, she wouldn't been in the crazy situation. According to her, 11 years difference is nothing for a man but for a woman, it's difficult. In fact, ageism turned her into a liar.
Merci d'avance.
Emilie.
Réponse: Correction - Summary de brettdallen, postée le 01-12-2009 à 21:58:08 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je jette un coup d'œil!
1) Summary of the poem:
Yesterday, I read a poem in the ad Harley Davidson(je ne vois pas de quoi il s'agit...). Near(choisissez une autre préposition: "sous", "au-dessus", "à côté de"...) the poem, there was a picture with("of") a("old" commence par un son voyelle, donc?) oldman(en deux mots) with few("a few") wrinkles. Into("In")(ou "When I read") the poem, I understood that the boy did a come back(mal dit) in his life. The boy said(that) if he had his life to live over, he had("would") try to make more mistakes, he would
2) Summary of the text:
Last week, I saw("vu" ou "lu"?) an text
The first indication that change was imminent came earlier today when Est Berlin’s Communist party
3) Summary of the text:
It's("about"/"the story of") a woman who had a problem with age. It begun when she celebrated her fortieth birthday. She slowly got over the shock and tried to convince herself that life begins at 40. She met a man who playing(past) badminton. He has(pour l'âge: "be", à conjuguer) 31 but he looks(présent/passé?) about 19. He had no idea how old she had. During her life , she had been totally honest but in the relationship, she lies(passé + perfect) about her job and years("age"). If she had been brave enought to admit that she was 11 years older than him, she wouldn't(have) been in the("that") crazy situation. According to her, 11 years difference is nothing for a man but for a woman, it's difficult. In fact, ageism turned her into a liar.
Je n'ai pas tout signalé, mais il serait intéressant que vous commenciez à améliorer en fonction de mes indications afin que nous puissions ensuite affiner.
Cordialement.
Réponse: Correction - Summary de emii3108, postée le 02-12-2009 à 08:34:06 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Merci pour les indications. J'ai corrigé les fautes, les bonnes réponses se trouvent en vert.
Un tout grand merci .
Emilie.
1) Summary of the poem:
Yesterday, I read a poem in the ad Harley Davidson(Il s'agit d'un poème se trouvant sur une publicité pour Harley Davidson). Nearby the poem, there was a picture with of an old man with a few wrinkles. When I read the poem, I understood that the man has returned back into his life. The boy said(that) if he had his life to live over, he would have try to make more mistakes, he would be relax, he would be do more trips… In fact, he would like to do everything all that he likes and he would live every moment after another.
2) Summary of the text:
Last week, I saw("vu" ou "lu"?) an text which spoke about the Berlin Wall. It had been("was") erected in 1961 on the orders of East Germany’s former leader stop people leaving for West Germany. The wall and the other fortifications along 860 miles border shared by East and West Germany ( Cela signifie que le mur et les autres fortifications font 860 miles et qu'elles divisent l'Est et l'Ouest de l'Allemagne) .The people who tried to climb the wall were killed by border guards.
The first indication that change was imminent came earlier today when Est Berlin’s Communist party spoken announced East Germans would be allowed to travel directly to West Germany.The Berlin Wall had been breached after nearly threee decades keeping East and West Berliners apart. On 1989 : Berliners celebrated the fall of the wall.
3) Summary of the text:
The stoyre of a woman who had a problem with age. It begun when she celebrated her fortieth birthday. She slowly got over the shock and tried to convince herself that life begins at 40. She met a man who played badminton. He was 31 but he looked about 19. He had no idea how old she had. During her life , she had been totally honest but in the relationship, she lied about her job and old. If she had been brave enought to admit that she was 11 years older than him, she wouldn't have been in the crazy situation. According to her, 11 years difference is nothing for a man but for a woman, it's difficult. In fact, ageism turned her into a liar.
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Modifié par emii3108 le 02-12-2009 08:34
Réponse: Correction - Summary de fatih6250, postée le 06-12-2009 à 14:39:39 (S | E)
pourriez vous me corriger ce texte . it's a summer evening at a party . there were a lot of people the burglar was dressedin black he wear a hood.he was drunck he climbed trought window in the kitchen.the cupboard was locked and he smashed a cupboard. the cupboard there were: a jewels toplop a paintigs a cd players . he stale everything.the neighbours herad a noise .the light was on they phoned the police. the burglar went downstairs in order to get out . he was arrested by police
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