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Correction de description pour film !!!!
Message de overshambles posté le 18-11-2009 à 15:57:39 (S | E | F)
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger cette description SVP ?!
La description porte sur ce poster : Lien Internet
This document is a poster which represents a German film which I like a lot. In the middle of the poster, we can see a man who turns his back to us. It’s the main actor. At the bottom of the poster we are showing the big title with above a drawing which represents the wave. Below the title, we can see the name of the director, Dennis Gansel. At the top of the poster, there are the names of the main actors. In the background of the actor from behind, we can see lots of pupils , all dressed in white and making the same gesture. Predominant colors are white, red and black. The film wants to denounce the dictatorship in Germany. Furthermore, the film wants make us think about the methods employed by this regime. It is a very convincing film with the suspense and the sadness. The actors are great and the very fascinating story. That’s why, it is a fabulous film!
Je vous remercie pas avance !!
Message de overshambles posté le 18-11-2009 à 15:57:39 (S | E | F)
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger cette description SVP ?!
La description porte sur ce poster : Lien Internet
This document is a poster which represents a German film which I like a lot. In the middle of the poster, we can see a man who turns his back to us. It’s the main actor. At the bottom of the poster we are showing the big title with above a drawing which represents the wave. Below the title, we can see the name of the director, Dennis Gansel. At the top of the poster, there are the names of the main actors. In the background of the actor from behind, we can see lots of pupils , all dressed in white and making the same gesture. Predominant colors are white, red and black. The film wants to denounce the dictatorship in Germany. Furthermore, the film wants make us think about the methods employed by this regime. It is a very convincing film with the suspense and the sadness. The actors are great and the very fascinating story. That’s why, it is a fabulous film!
Je vous remercie pas avance !!
Réponse: Correction de description pour film !!!! de gabi26, postée le 18-11-2009 à 17:22:05 (S | E)
Bonjour,
voici quelques pistes (qui n'engagent que moi, bien sûr!) :
"This document is a poster which represents a German film which I like a lot. (tournure peu élégante) In the middle of the poster, we can see a man who turns his back to us (construction inexacte). It’s the main actor. At the bottom of the poster we are showing the big title with above a drawing which represents the wave. Below the title, we can see the name of the director, Dennis Gansel. At the top of the poster, there are the names of the main actors. In the background of the actor from behind, we can see lots of pupils , all dressed in white and making the same gesture. Predominant colors are white, red and black. The film wants to denounce the dictatorship in Germany. Furthermore, the film wants make us think about (autre petite faute) the methods employed by this regime. It is a very convincing film with the suspense and the sadness (Tu dois pouvoir trouver une meilleure tournure.). The actors are great (peut-être peux tu choisir un mot plus précis?) and the very fascinating story. (construction inexacte) That’s why, it is a fabulous film! "
Ne peux-tu pas ajouter une petite phrase sur le salut militaire? Je crois que je préciserais que le titre est aussi la vague. Je donnerais aussi mon impression sur le choix de mettre l'acteur principal de dos et les étudiants face aux spectateurs...Et enfin préciserais que cela se passe à notre époque et dénonce non pas la dictature en Allemagne mais toutes les formes de par le monde de régimes totalitaires. A toi de mettre tout ça en anglais si cela t'intéresse! Ce ne sont que des suppositions. Bon courage!
Cordialement,
Gabi26
Réponse: Correction de description pour film !!!! de overshambles, postée le 18-11-2009 à 17:43:51 (S | E)
Merci pour votre aide ! J'ai essayé de corriger les fautes mais j'ai eu un peu de mal, il y a une faute que je n'ai pas trouver et quant aux autres, je ne suis pas sûres qu'elles soient juste !
"This document is a poster which represents a German film which I like very much. In the middle of the poster, we can see a man who turns his back to us (construction inexacte). It’s the main actor. At the bottom of the poster we are showing the big title with above a drawing which represents the wave. Below the title, we can see the name of the director, Dennis Gansel. At the top of the poster, there are the names of the main actors. In the background of the actor from behind, we can see lots of pupils , all dressed in white and making the same gesture. Predominant colors are white, red and black. The film wants to denounce the dictatorship in Germany. Furthermore, the film wants to make us think about the methods employed by this regime. It is a very convincing film with a lot of suspense and the sadness at the end. The actors are very good and the story is very fascinating.That’s why, it is a fabulous film! "
Merci pour vos suppositions ! Je pourrais y travailler dessus !
Réponse: Correction de description pour film !!!! de bsnlolo, postée le 18-11-2009 à 18:20:59 (S | E)
This document is a poster which represents a German film which I like very much. In the middle of the poster, we can see a man who turns his back to on(c'est ma faute je n'avais pas vu que tu n'avais pas corrigé cela dans ton autre post désolé) us (construction inexacte). It’s the main actor. At the bottom of the poster we are showing (cela veut dire: "nous somme entrain de montrer" je ne suis pas sur que c'est ce que tu veux dire) the big title with above a drawing which represents representing the wave. Below the title, we can see the name of the director, Dennis Gansel. At the top of the poster, there are the names of the main actors. In the background of the actor from behind, we can see lots of pupils , all dressed in white and making the same gesture. Predominant colors are white, red and black. The film wants to denounce the dictatorship in Germany. Furthermore, the film wants to make us think about the methods employed by this regime. It is a very convincing film with a lot of suspense and the sadness at the end (pourquoi pas "a sad ending". The actors are very good and the story is very fascinating.That’s why, it is a fabulous film! "
above: il est préférable de le placer à la fin de ta phrase.
- the big title with, a drawing representing a wave, above. (Quelque chose comme ça, je n'ai jamais été très bon pour placer les virgules lol)
Voila, avec tout ça tu devrais t'en sortir.
Amicalement,
LoLo
Réponse: Correction de description pour film !!!! de overshambles, postée le 18-11-2009 à 18:25:43 (S | E)
Encore un énorme merci à LOLO pour son aide !
Oui je crois que je vais m'en sortir !
Et je voudrais vous dire que votre façon de nous "corriger " est super car vous ne donnez pas les réponses tout de suite ( il faut chercher quand même ) et que vous nous donnez des indices pour réussir ! Le travail n'est donc pas " maché " et cela nous permet de nous améliorer !
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