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Message de mathjulie posté le 15-11-2009 à 12:36:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai un devoir en anglais, une petite rédaction (200 mots) où l'on doit imaginer le futur dans 9 ans d'une personnede 16 ans, sa profession, sa vie . Pourriez-vous vérifier si je n'ai pas fait de fautes et si les expressions que j'utilise sont justes ? Merci d'avance. La voici:
It's very difficult to plan a life because a little thing cxan all thwart.
Nevertheless, when I am 25, I imagine my futur with a lot of different way beause I a m very interesting by a mass of ptrrofession and subject. For example, i would like to be astrophysicist, in fact I am facsinated by the stars, the climate, the universe and all this questions without answers, regularly I buy quality paper relating to this subject. However, I am also captivate by history and art with profession like archeolog or architect. Actually, I like watch old photograph, visited museum. I have read two romans pof Dan Brown "Angel and Demons" and "Da Vinci Code" wich I had loved. It deals a lot of history. Similary I am crazy about plastic art and architecture. I like painting, drawing, designing. But the profession that I am thinking the most of doing is doctor, more exactly surgeon or cancer specialist, or else dental surgeon, because I deellike to helping people, leading a fight against some illness, doing scientific research to find remedies.
But this profession needs, long study years, about ten years and before the "Baccalauréat" I want to make two years of preparatory classes. Consequently, I think that at twenty years old, I will be in the Faculty of Medicine if I manage to study. I thinf that I will live with my parents because this plan will be very expensive.
Thus, I have a lot of dreams. In firts, I hope to pactise the profession of doctor. Morever, I want to feel like being happy, full-bloom. I also desire to build a family an be under cover financially. I dream of making a lot of presents to my parents so as to than them for my education, and all the sacrifices that they maked for me an d my sister.
To conclude, within nine years, I don't really know what profession I will practise but I make a profession wich will enjoy m and will permit me to be full-bloom.
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Modifié par bridg le 15-11-2009 12:41
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Message de mathjulie posté le 15-11-2009 à 12:36:40 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai un devoir en anglais, une petite rédaction (200 mots) où l'on doit imaginer le futur dans 9 ans d'une personnede 16 ans, sa profession, sa vie . Pourriez-vous vérifier si je n'ai pas fait de fautes et si les expressions que j'utilise sont justes ? Merci d'avance. La voici:
It's very difficult to plan a life because a little thing cxan all thwart.
Nevertheless, when I am 25, I imagine my futur with a lot of different way beause I a m very interesting by a mass of ptrrofession and subject. For example, i would like to be astrophysicist, in fact I am facsinated by the stars, the climate, the universe and all this questions without answers, regularly I buy quality paper relating to this subject. However, I am also captivate by history and art with profession like archeolog or architect. Actually, I like watch old photograph, visited museum. I have read two romans pof Dan Brown "Angel and Demons" and "Da Vinci Code" wich I had loved. It deals a lot of history. Similary I am crazy about plastic art and architecture. I like painting, drawing, designing. But the profession that I am thinking the most of doing is doctor, more exactly surgeon or cancer specialist, or else dental surgeon, because I deellike to helping people, leading a fight against some illness, doing scientific research to find remedies.
But this profession needs, long study years, about ten years and before the "Baccalauréat" I want to make two years of preparatory classes. Consequently, I think that at twenty years old, I will be in the Faculty of Medicine if I manage to study. I thinf that I will live with my parents because this plan will be very expensive.
Thus, I have a lot of dreams. In firts, I hope to pactise the profession of doctor. Morever, I want to feel like being happy, full-bloom. I also desire to build a family an be under cover financially. I dream of making a lot of presents to my parents so as to than them for my education, and all the sacrifices that they maked for me an d my sister.
To conclude, within nine years, I don't really know what profession I will practise but I make a profession wich will enjoy m and will permit me to be full-bloom.
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Modifié par bridg le 15-11-2009 12:41
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Réponse: futur dans 9 ans/ correction de ch0upinette-91, postée le 15-11-2009 à 15:34:44 (S | E)
Hello !! I am
French !!! My name is Elise, and I am learning English. I am new to the site and I like that one begins to know as I know nobody .I do not speak very good English !! Bye Bye !!!Réponse: futur dans 9 ans/ correction de gerondif, postée le 15-11-2009 à 18:33:35 (S | E)
It's very difficult for me to plan my life in advance because so many details could alter things.
Nevertheless, when I am 25, I imagine my future life in a lot of different ways because I am very interestED IN various jobs and subjects. For example, I would like to be AN astrophysicist, in fact I am fascinated by the stars, the climate, the universe and all thESE questions without answers. I regularly buy quality newpapers dealing with thESE subjectS. However, I am also captivateD by history and art leading to jobs like archeologist or architect. AT THE MOMENT, I like watchING old photographs, visitING museums. I read two NOVELS by Dan Brown "Angel and Demons" and "Da Vinci Code" which I loved. It is a lot ABOUT history. Similarly I am crazy about arts and architecture. I like painting, drawing, designing. But the profession that I am thinking the most of doing is doctor, more exactly surgeon or cancer specialist, or else dental surgeon, because I would like to help people, to lead a fight against some illnesses, to do scientific research, to find new medecine.
But this profession needs long years of study, about ten years and AFTER the "Baccalauréat" I want to make two years of preparatory classes. Consequently, I think that at twenty years old, I will be in the Faculty of Medicine if I manage to get there. I think that I will live at my parents'(house) because this plan will be very expensive.
So, I have a lot of dreams. First, I hope to pactise the profession of doctor. Morever, I want to feel happy, in full-bloom. I also wish to raise a family and to be well-off financially. I dream of making a lot of presents to my parents so as to thank them for my education, and all the sacrifices that they MADE for me and my sister.
To conclude, nine years from now, I don't really know what profession I will practise but I will do a job that I will enjoy and that will allow me to be in full bloom.
(je ne suis pas sûr que "in full bloom" pour "épanoui" soit utilisable métaphoriquement.)
Réponse: futur dans 9 ans/ correction de mathjulie, postée le 15-11-2009 à 18:38:16 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup
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