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Message de sandra161086 posté le 10-11-2009 à 17:13:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à toutes et tous.
Ma prof d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction à faire à propos d'une maison hanté. Il s'agit d'imaginer la suite du texte qu'elle a donné. Dès lors, pourriez-vous corriger le texte ci-joint et m'expliquer les fautes que j'aurai faites?. Un grand merci d'avance en tout cas!
And go into the house. I was so afraid that my heart has almost broke when I saw what it was really: a big quite dusty monster. It was very ugly. It was dressed in a grey, very dirty suit. It would have said that his garment was a big sheet. It had a long dark hair and nasty small black spherical eyes. I was really terrified!
Luckily he hadn’t seen me. I run then to the first floor to go and hide me. During this time there, the monster destroyed everything on its passage. I really spent a horrible night. I did not put my feet in this house…
Message de sandra161086 posté le 10-11-2009 à 17:13:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à toutes et tous.
Ma prof d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction à faire à propos d'une maison hanté. Il s'agit d'imaginer la suite du texte qu'elle a donné. Dès lors, pourriez-vous corriger le texte ci-joint et m'expliquer les fautes que j'aurai faites?. Un grand merci d'avance en tout cas!
And go into the house. I was so afraid that my heart has almost broke when I saw what it was really: a big quite dusty monster. It was very ugly. It was dressed in a grey, very dirty suit. It would have said that his garment was a big sheet. It had a long dark hair and nasty small black spherical eyes. I was really terrified!
Luckily he hadn’t seen me. I run then to the first floor to go and hide me. During this time there, the monster destroyed everything on its passage. I really spent a horrible night. I did not put my feet in this house…
Réponse: The haunted house (rédaction à corriger) de robertbrou, postée le 10-11-2009 à 19:57:56 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici mes suggestions:
And go (temps) into the house. I was so afraid that my heart has almost broke (phrase idiomatique - "broken heart" = triste) [ponctuation] When I saw what it was really (placement): a big [ponctuation] quite dusty monster. It was very ugly. It was dressed in a grey, very dirty (moi, je l'aurai mis devant grey) suit. It (autre traduction de 'On' dans 'On dirait') would have said that his garment was a big sheet. It had a long dark hair and nasty small [ponctuation] black spherical eyes. I was really terrified!
Luckily he hadn’t seen me. I run (temps) then (placement) to the first floor to go and hide
Pour les phrases idiomatiques, pourriez-vous donner l'éqivalent en français?
Hope this helps!
Réponse: The haunted house (rédaction à corriger) de tchelo, postée le 10-11-2009 à 21:34:49 (S | E)
AND GO INTO THE HOUSE ke voulai tu dire pa là? then i run(i run then nè pa la forme correcte).the monster destroys(the monster destryed nè pa la forme correcte)
Réponse: The haunted house (rédaction à corriger) de sandra161086, postée le 11-11-2009 à 13:00:18 (S | E)
Merci à ceux et celles qui ont eu la gentillesse de corriger ma rédaction. Je vous tiendrai évidemment au courant de la note que j'obtiendrai.
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