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Message de margaux17 posté le 09-11-2009 à 13:25:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Pouvez-vous me dire ce que je dois corriger.
-In this novel, we look closely at a man. He is a man who overnight hand without leaving living proof. This creates around him, a great mystery. It is a very close friend of the stranger, who tells us the secrets to breathtaking. His friend Peter reveals that he is a serial killer and that every time he changes city he changed identity. He even resorted to cosmetic surgery does not recognize.....
-Through this novel, we discover that King Arthur is and what is its mission. Before becoming king, he was a knight of the roundtable. One day he was met Merlin the magician. Its mission was to find the Grail and Excalibur. Only Arthur was able to have Excalibur since Merlin had given him power to remove a stone. This sword has great power....
Merci à tous de votre aide !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-11-2009 15:35
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Message de margaux17 posté le 09-11-2009 à 13:25:53 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Pouvez-vous me dire ce que je dois corriger.
-In this novel, we look closely at a man. He is a man who overnight hand without leaving living proof. This creates around him, a great mystery. It is a very close friend of the stranger, who tells us the secrets to breathtaking. His friend Peter reveals that he is a serial killer and that every time he changes city he changed identity. He even resorted to cosmetic surgery does not recognize.....
-Through this novel, we discover that King Arthur is and what is its mission. Before becoming king, he was a knight of the roundtable. One day he was met Merlin the magician. Its mission was to find the Grail and Excalibur. Only Arthur was able to have Excalibur since Merlin had given him power to remove a stone. This sword has great power....
Merci à tous de votre aide !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-11-2009 15:35
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Réponse: Correction/we look closely at a man de bsnlolo, postée le 09-11-2009 à 15:02:32 (S | E)
In this novel, we look closely at a man. He is a man who overnight hand without leaving living proof. This creates a great mystery around him. He is a very close friend of the stranger, who tells us the secrets of breathtaking. His friend Peter reveals that he is a serial killer and that every time he changes city he changes (respect du parallelism, on garde le même temps pour les deux verbes) identity. He even resorted to cosmetic surgery does not recognize.....(je ne suis pas sur de comprendre le sens de ta phrase... tu voudrais dire "il a même recours à la chirurgie plastic afin de ne pas être démasqué/reconnu ?
Dans ce cas je te propose: he even has appeal to plastic surgery in order not to be discovered)
-Through this novel, we discover what King Arthur is and what is its mission. Before becoming king, he was a knight of the roundtable ( ou a roundtable's knight ). One day he met Merlin the magician. Its mission was to find the (Holy)Grail and Excalibur. Only Arthur was able to have Excalibur since Merlin had given him the power to remove it from the stone. This sword has great power....
En espérant que cela te convienne.
Amicalement,
LoLo
Réponse: Correction/we look closely at a man de margaux17, postée le 09-11-2009 à 15:21:31 (S | E)
Merci !
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