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Message de g0ssipgirl posté le 25-05-2008 à 10:54:01 (S | E | F)
Hello !
Voici ma lettre de motivation pour intégrer une seconde européenne à la rentrée:
Subject: request about European section.
Sir, Madam,
At present, student in 3ème on secondary school X, I would like integrate the European section in [lycée] Y.
I have begun to learn english in primary school and I've developed a pourr profound this language and them, at time of my educational trip in england organised by my establishment, by the english culture. This trip [m'a donné]envy to speak english fluently.
The practice about abroad language parries me essential for my professional life that I envisage because It's right that english It is spoke in all the world, and this language [est une ouverture au contact international]
I have ever been some films on originals versions and some episodes about my favourites series in english. Furthermore I listen a lot of groups or artists who sing in english. I like translate them chorus for [les] understand and hope my vocabulary.
I think I have qualities requested for integrate your college.
Yours faithfully, [ou autre formule de politesse]
PS: Je présente ma lettre en français (destinaitaire à droite, expéditeur à gauche) ou bien en anglais (expéditeur à droite & destinataire à gauche )? Je l'envoi à un lycée public en France & j'ai peur d'etre pénalisée s'ils ne se rendent pas compte qu'il s'agit d'une en-tête anglaise...
Merci d'avance pour vos suggestions et corrections.
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Modifié par bridg le 25-05-2008 11:03
Lettre de motivation / divers
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Modifié par g0ssipgirl le 25-05-2008 12:45
Message de g0ssipgirl posté le 25-05-2008 à 10:54:01 (S | E | F)
Hello !
Voici ma lettre de motivation pour intégrer une seconde européenne à la rentrée:
Subject: request about European section.
Sir, Madam,
At present, student in 3ème on secondary school X, I would like integrate the European section in [lycée] Y.
I have begun to learn english in primary school and I've developed a pourr profound this language and them, at time of my educational trip in england organised by my establishment, by the english culture. This trip [m'a donné]envy to speak english fluently.
The practice about abroad language parries me essential for my professional life that I envisage because It's right that english It is spoke in all the world, and this language [est une ouverture au contact international]
I have ever been some films on originals versions and some episodes about my favourites series in english. Furthermore I listen a lot of groups or artists who sing in english. I like translate them chorus for [les] understand and hope my vocabulary.
I think I have qualities requested for integrate your college.
Yours faithfully, [ou autre formule de politesse]
PS: Je présente ma lettre en français (destinaitaire à droite, expéditeur à gauche) ou bien en anglais (expéditeur à droite & destinataire à gauche )? Je l'envoi à un lycée public en France & j'ai peur d'etre pénalisée s'ils ne se rendent pas compte qu'il s'agit d'une en-tête anglaise...
Merci d'avance pour vos suggestions et corrections.
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Modifié par bridg le 25-05-2008 11:03
Lettre de motivation / divers
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Modifié par g0ssipgirl le 25-05-2008 12:45
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de lucile83, postée le 25-05-2008 à 11:35:59 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici des liens pour la présentation de lettre en anglais car c'est moins simple que vous ne pensez :
Lien Internet
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Si vous l'envoyez à des français j'opterais pour la présentation française, mais ce n'est que mon avis.
See you
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de g0ssipgirl, postée le 25-05-2008 à 11:43:15 (S | E)
Merci pour votre aide.
Qui peut corriger mes fautes ?
Je précise que ma lettre doit être manuscrite, donc la présentation se fera sur la feuille définitive.
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Modifié par bridg le 25-05-2008 12:40
L'urgence n'existe pas sur ce site, nous sommes un dimanche de la fête des mères, comprenez le délai, il y a des priorités famliales pour même pour les bénévoles
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de g0ssipgirl, postée le 25-05-2008 à 14:11:02 (S | E)
J'ai fais quelques modifications:
Object: Application for your european section.
Sir, Madam,
I am currently a sudent in our 3d grade in secondrary school Paul Bert, and I would like integrate the european section in [lycée] Leopold Sedar Senghor.
I have begun to learn english in primary school and I have developed a serious interest in your language and, after a school trip to England, in British culture. I am determined to speak english fluently.
The practice about abroad language parries me essential for my profesional life that I envisage because It's right that english It is spoke everywhere in the world, and this language [est une ouverture au contact international]
I have ever been some film on originals versiones and some episodes about my favourites series in english. Futhermore I listen a lot of groups or artists who sing in english. I like translate theim lyrics for understand and enrich my vocabulary.
I think [or belive that] I have qualities requested for integrate your etablishment because I love participate in the oral and I supply serious and applied work
Yours faithfully, [ou autre formule de politesse].
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de santu_mobundi, postée le 25-05-2008 à 14:55:18 (S | E)
correction de Santu_mobundi
slt, Voici une autre correction à partir de la réponde de g0ssipgirl
object: Application for your European section.
Sir, Madam,
I am currently a student in our 3d grade in secondary school Paul Bert, and I would like to integrate the European section in Leopold Seder Senghor school .
I have begun to learn English in primary school and I have developed a serious interest in your language and, after a school trip to England, in British culture, I am determined to speak English fluently.
The practise about abroad language parries me essential for my professional life that I envisage. Indeed, it's right that English is spoken everywhere in the world, and this language is an opening to international relationships.
I have many films and many episodes about my favourites series in English. Furthermore I listen to a lot of groups or artists who sing in english. I like translating them lyrics to understand and enrich my vocabulary.
I think [or believe that] I have requested qualities for integrate your Establishment. I like to get involved in any discussion and I've a serious interest to work.
Your faithfully, [ou autre formule de politesse].
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de g0ssipgirl, postée le 25-05-2008 à 15:19:44 (S | E)
Euh ce n'est pas plutot
I have EVER SEEN many films ?
Merci pour ta correction
Gr^àce à ta correction j'ai pu faire ça:
Object: Application for your European section.
Sir, Madam,
I am currently a student in our 3d grade in secondary school Paul Bert, and I would like to integrate the European section in Leopold Sedar Senghor school .
I have begun to learn English in primary school and I have developed a serious interest in your language and, after a school trip to England, in British culture, I am determined to speak English fluently.
The practise about abroad language parries me essential for my professional life that I envisage. Indeed, it's right that English is spoken everywhere in the world, and this language is an opening to international relationships.
I have ever seen many films and many episodes about my favourites series in English. Furthermore I listen to a lot of groups or news artists who sing in english. I like translating lyrics to understand them and enrich my vocabulary.
I think I have requested qualities for integrate your establishment. I like to get involved in any discussion and I supply regular,serious, and applied work.
Your faithfully.
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Modifié par g0ssipgirl le 25-05-2008 15:32
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Modifié par g0ssipgirl le 25-05-2008 15:33
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de lucile83, postée le 25-05-2008 à 16:21:43 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Sir, Madam,
I am currently (a student in our 3d grade
) in secondary school Paul Bert, and I would like to integrate the European section in Leopold Sedar Senghor school .I (have begun
) to learn English in... primary school and I have developed a serious interest in your language and, after a school trip to England, in British culture, I am determined to speak English fluently.The (practise
ortho ) about (abroad language) (parries???) me essential for (my professional life that I envisage). Indeed, it's right that English is spoken everywhere in the world(trop lourd), and this language is an (opening )to international relationships.I (have ever seen
) many films and many episodes about my favourites series in English. Furthermore I listen to a lot of groups or news artists who sing in english. I like translating lyrics to understand them and enrich my vocabulary.I think I have requested qualities for integrate your establishment(
un peu prétentieux,à éviter). I like to get involved in any discussion and I (supply regular,serious, and appliedmal dit,tournez autrement) work.Your
faithfully.Lire ceci :
Lien Internet
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de phileas17, postée le 25-05-2008 à 16:51:40 (S | E)
Here's my propsal:
Object: Application for your European section.
Sir, Madam,
I am currently a student in our 3d grade in secondary school Paul Bert, and I would like to integrate the European section in Leopold Sedar Senghor school .
I [have begun] I would write: I have beginning to learn English in primary school and I [have developed] have been developping a serious interest for this language. After a school trip to England I am determined to speak English fluently.
The practise about abroad language seems to me essential for the professional life that I expect to do. Indeed, it's right that English is spoken everywhere in the world, and this language is an opening to international relationships.
I have [ever] seen many films and many episodes about my favourite[s] in English always the adjectives are invariable series in English. Furthermore I listen to a lot of groups or news(?) artists who sing in English. I like translating lyrics to understand them and [to] enrich my vocabulary.
I think I have [the] requested qualities [for]to integrate your establishment. [I like to get involved in any discussion] I suggest: If you wish it I’m ready for a conversation. [and I supply] Iam told regular,serious, and [applied]hard worker.
Your faithfully.
May be somebody else has a better speech
Réponse: Lettre de motivation (correction) de g0ssipgirl, postée le 29-05-2008 à 20:13:30 (S | E)
Bonjour à tous.
Je voudrais savoir commen traduire
"Dans l'espoir d'obtenir une réponse favoravble à ma requête."
Ou comment l'exprimer autrement ?
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Modifié par g0ssipgirl le 29-05-2008 20:14
