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Message de neptuune posté le 09-11-2019 à 17:45:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous.
Je suis en seconde et ma classe Européenne participe à un projet d'échange ERASMUS entre quatre pays. Les places sont restreintes et on nous demande de faire une candidature (format libre). J'ai opté pour un diaporama, avec ma voix en fond.
J'ai fait un premier essai,j'ai déjà essayé de le corriger mais je demande votre aide pour mettre toutes les chances de mon côté.
Merci pour votre aide !

1)Tip :
You will see this logo It is to listen my voice.
Don’t need to click on, it is automatic.

Slides start right after.
Good viewing !

2)Summary
① Why I am interested in ERASMUS ?

②Why should you accept me ?

③In which country would I like to go and with who ?

3)Why am I interested in ERASMUS

It is a way to discover other countries, their traditions and their inhabitants, and I love do it !
ERASMUS allows to be immersed in an other language, so we progress in vocabulary and listening comprehension
Besides, I would like work in aviation’s world and it international language is English. So, this exchange can help me to better speaking english and get closer to my goal to speak fluent this language for my future work.

4)Why should you accept me ?

I am a studious student, who do the work asked, without never complaining !
I will be always to club ERASMUS, every Thursday.
I am creative for projects, particularly on computer.
I am so motivated for ERASMUS !

5)In which country would I like to go and with who ?

All three countries, Croatia, Portugal and Poland, motivate me. But, if I could choose, I’ll choose Croatia. It looks like to be a beautiful country, where I never have been and I would like to discover it, its landscapes, its history and its inhabitants.

I haven’t problems with someone in the class, but I’ll like to go in Croatia with my friend, x.

6)Thank to have read and hear me.
I hope I was able to convince you !


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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-11-2019 19:06

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Réponse : Amélioration/ texte de neptuune, postée le 11-11-2019 à 18:27:34 (S | E)
Quelqu'un peut il jeter un coup d’œil s'il vous plaît ? Histoire de savoir si ça va ou si je dois changer quelques trucs.

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Réponse : Amélioration/ texte de laure95, postée le 14-11-2019 à 17:09:41 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
1)Tip :
You will see this logo It is (mal dit)to listen (préposition) my voice.

2)Summary
① Why I am interested in ERASMUS ?: ordre des mots ou enlever le point d'interrogation

③In which country would I like to go (préposition)and with who ?

and I love do it !: love + verbe + -ing
so we (make)progress in vocabulary and listening comprehension
Besides, I would like (préposition)work in aviation’s world (mal dit)and it international language is English. So, this exchange can help me to better (pas à la bonne place)speaking (infinitif) english (majuscule)and get closer to my goal to speak fluent (pas à la bonne place)this language for my future work (job pas work).

4)
I am a studious student, who do (faute de conjugaison) the work (pas le bon mot ici) asked, without never complaining !
I will be always to (pas à la bonne préposition)club ERASMUS (ordre des mots), every Thursday.

5)In which country would I like to go and with who ? ordre des mots

All (enlever all) three countries, Croatia, Portugal and Poland, motivate me.
It looks like to be (enlever to be)a beautiful country,
where I never have been( ordre des mots)

I haven’t (got any)problems with someone (anybody pas someone)in the (my pas the) class,
- but I’ll like: conditionnel to go in (pas la bonne préposition)Croatia with my friend, x.

6)Thank(s) to have read and hear (participe passé) me.

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