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Message de perfect posté le 08-04-2019 à 20:33:21 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Voici ma petite rédaction sur les corvées à la maison :

Let's begin at home: the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much! The other parents don't make their children do that. To start with, my parents tell me to help with the housework, what does that mean? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do all/everything at home. Sometimes, my parents make me to iron, hoover, clear the table, tidy up my room, it’s very annoying ! Moreover, my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too? We have got a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends during hours. How will I do to hanging out downtown with my friends ? Super lame! I have to not/CANNOT eat sweets before dinner time, eat pizza in my bed and they don't let me watch a little bit TV late on weekdays, they are pushing it too far! On the top of that, I have to stay at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing/nothing can be done), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's nosense and it’s so unfair!

Merci d'avance,
Baydi

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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-04-2019 22:51

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Réponse : Rédaction/Aide de gerondif, postée le 08-04-2019 à 20:52:17 (S | E)
Bonjour
erreurs en bleu
Let's begin at home: the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much! The other parents don't make their children do that. To start with, my parents tell me to help with the housework, what does that mean? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do all/everything at home. Sometimes, my parents make me to iron, hoover, clear the table, tidy up my room, it’s very annoying ! Moreover, my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too? We have got a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends during hours. How will I do(expression maladroite do to) to hanging out downtown with my friends ? Super lame!'sens ? infirme ?) I have to not/CANNOT (ne recopiez pas l'erreur et la correction de vaiana) eat sweets before dinner time, eat pizza in my bed and they don't let me watch a little bit TV late on weekdays, they are pushing it too far! On the top of that, I have to stay at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing/nothing can be done (there's nothing to be done)), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's nosense(orthographe) and it’s so unfair!

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Réponse : Rédaction/Aide de perfect, postée le 08-04-2019 à 21:19:44 (S | E)
Bonsoir,

Merci beaucoup pour cette correction :

Let's begin at home: the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much! The other parents don't make their children do that. To start with, my parents tell me to help with the housework, what does that mean? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do everything at home. Sometimes, my parents make me to (je ne sais pas par quoi le remplacer ) iron, hoover, clear the table, tidy up my room, it’s very annoying ! Moreover, my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too? We have got a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friendsfor hours. How will I do to hang out downtown with my friends ? Super lame ! au sens "trop nul !" I cannot eat sweets before dinner time, eat pizza in my bed and they don't let me watch a little bit TV late on weekdays, they are pushing it too far! On the top of that, I have to stay at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing/nothing can be done (there's nothing to be done)), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's no sense (avec un espace ? sinon je ne sais pas) and it’s so unfair!

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Réponse : Rédaction/Aide de gerondif, postée le 08-04-2019 à 22:58:06 (S | E)
Bonjour
j'ai l'impression que vous abusez du "je ne sais pas" jusqu'à ce que la solution tombe du ciel.
Alors : faire faire :
1)The teacher makes the pupils work. Le complément fait l'action.
2) I had my car repaired; Le complément subit l'action.

Nonsense en un seul mot.

Let's begin at home: the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much! The other parents don't make their children do that. To start with, my parents tell me to help with the housework, what does that mean? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do everything at home. Sometimes, my parents make me to (je ne sais pas par quoi le remplacer ) iron, hoover, clear the table, tidy up my room, it’s very annoying ! Moreover, my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too? We have got a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends for hours. How will I do to hang out downtown with my friends ? Super lame (jamais entendu, ça ne sonne pas trop anglais, plutôt français traduit mot-à-mot) ! au sens "trop nul !" I cannot eat sweets before dinner time, eat pizza in my bed and they don't let me watch TV late on weekdays, even a little bit , they are pushing it too far! On the(à ôter) top of that, I have to stay at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing/nothing can be done (there's nothing to be done)(si le sens est on s'ennuie à force de ne rien avoir la possibilité de faire, there is nothing for us to do but get bored), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's no sense (avec un espace ? sinon je ne sais pas) and it’s so unfair!

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