House chores/correction
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Message de perfect posté le 07-04-2019 à 22:17:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je me permets de poser ici une petite rédaction sur les corvées à la maison, les fameux "house chores"
La professeur nous demande de ne pas être réjoui à l'idée de les faire, de protester, et de se plaindre.
Elle appelle ça "My protesting competion".
Voici mon texte :
Let's begin at home : the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much ! The other parents don't do that with their children. To start with, help the housework, what does that mean ? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do all at home. Then all that my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too ? We have a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends for hours. How will I do to hanging out with my friends downtown ? Super lame ! I have to not eat sweets before dinner and they don't let me watch a little bit, TV they are pushing it too far ! On the top of that, I have to say at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's nosense and it's so unfair !
Merci d'avance de vos réponses,
Perfect
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-04-2019 22:24
Corrections faites dans l'intro, pas dans la rédaction.
Competion??
Message de perfect posté le 07-04-2019 à 22:17:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je me permets de poser ici une petite rédaction sur les corvées à la maison, les fameux "house chores"
La professeur nous demande de ne pas être réjoui à l'idée de les faire, de protester, et de se plaindre.
Elle appelle ça "My protesting competion".
Voici mon texte :
Let's begin at home : the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much ! The other parents don't do that with their children. To start with, help the housework, what does that mean ? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do all at home. Then all that my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too ? We have a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends for hours. How will I do to hanging out with my friends downtown ? Super lame ! I have to not eat sweets before dinner and they don't let me watch a little bit, TV they are pushing it too far ! On the top of that, I have to say at school when a teacher is absent, (it's so boring, we can do nothing), whereas my parents let my little brother leave the school, that's nosense and it's so unfair !
Merci d'avance de vos réponses,
Perfect
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-04-2019 22:24
Corrections faites dans l'intro, pas dans la rédaction.
Competion??
Réponse : House chores/correction de vaiana, postée le 07-04-2019 à 22:32:00 (S | E)
Good evening! I'm not a bilingual
so please wait for another correction 
Let's begin at home: the famous housechores. At home, I have to do lots of chores and I think it's too much! The other parents don't make their children do that. To start with, helping with the housework, what does that mean? I'm not a slave and I'm too young to do all/everything at home. Then all that my parents don't let me go out, they make me babysit my little brother, Eli. He's nine years old. Don't they know I have a life too? We have got a garden and guess what, I have to rake the leaves, it's unbearable. I'm not allowed to phone my friends during hours. How will I do to hanging out downtown with my friends
By the way, there's no space before punctuation marks in English
Réponse : House chores/correction de perfect, postée le 07-04-2019 à 22:45:53 (S | E)
Hello,
Okay, no problem, I'll wait but I have a question : By what can we change "Then all that" ?
Thanks for your time,
Perfect
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