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Message de haek posté le 04-02-2019 à 21:25:39 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à vous,
j'ai réalisé un court résumé sur un texte et j'aimerais savoir si vous pourriez me corriger et m'aider à trouver mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses et bonne soirée à vous.
The document is an extract of “Prey”, a book written by Michael Crichton in 2002. In this extract, the author wants to highlight the fact that the evolution of our technologies can result in environmental problems. Indeed, these recent years, allowed us to understand that the heart is not immortal, we have to be careful to provide her subsistence. The writer claims that 3 technologies will meet, the nanotechnology, the biotechnology, and the computer technology, all of these technologies may have a bad impact on the biodiversity, therefore, we have to establish new laws to supervise it. The technology which will have the most important impact for the next years is the nanotechnology because it will permit to create new entities which will be able to grow by themselves without human assistance. The impact on our population and the heart will be unpredictable but revolutionary.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-02-2019 22:04
Message de haek posté le 04-02-2019 à 21:25:39 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à vous,
j'ai réalisé un court résumé sur un texte et j'aimerais savoir si vous pourriez me corriger et m'aider à trouver mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses et bonne soirée à vous.
The document is an extract of “Prey”, a book written by Michael Crichton in 2002. In this extract, the author wants to highlight the fact that the evolution of our technologies can result in environmental problems. Indeed, these recent years, allowed us to understand that the heart is not immortal, we have to be careful to provide her subsistence. The writer claims that 3 technologies will meet, the nanotechnology, the biotechnology, and the computer technology, all of these technologies may have a bad impact on the biodiversity, therefore, we have to establish new laws to supervise it. The technology which will have the most important impact for the next years is the nanotechnology because it will permit to create new entities which will be able to grow by themselves without human assistance. The impact on our population and the heart will be unpredictable but revolutionary.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 04-02-2019 22:04
Réponse : Correction/expression écrite de laure95, postée le 05-02-2019 à 09:52:21 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- an extract of (pas la bonne préposition)“Prey”, a book
- Indeed, these recent years, allowed (présent perfect, pour marquer un bilan)us to understand
- the heart is not immortal, we have to be careful to provide her (her?) subsistence.
Réponse : Correction/expression écrite de gerold, postée le 05-02-2019 à 10:14:59 (S | E)
Bonjour haek,
The document is an extract of “Prey”, a book written by Michael Crichton in 2002. In this extract, the author wants to highlight the fact that the evolution of our technologies can result in environmental problems. Indeed, these recent years, allowed enlevez la virgule us to understand that the heart = le cœur, cherchez le mot pour la Terre, mêmes lettres dans un ordre différent is not immortal, we have to be careful to provide her subsistence ce n'est pas "her" car la Terre n'est pas une personne, provide et subsistence ne vont pas bien dans ce contexte, dites plutôt "afin qu'elle ne meure pas". The writer claims that 3 technologies will meet, the nanotechnology, the biotechnology, and the computer technology, all of these technologies may have a bad impact on the biodiversity, therefore, we have to establish new laws to supervise plutôt "regulate" it pluriel (les trois technologies). The technology which will have the most important impact for the next years is the nanotechnology because it will permit to create new entities which will be able to grow by themselves without human assistance. The impact on our population and the heart will be unpredictable but revolutionary.
Réponse : Correction/expression écrite de haek, postée le 05-02-2019 à 16:43:06 (S | E)
très bien merci de vos réponses, je corrige mes fautes !
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