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Message de amiraalg posté le 01-05-2018 à 02:33:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous sollicite afin d'avoir une correction de mon texte concernant la notion "Places and forms of Power" mais également des avis si cela est possible.
Merci d'avance.
I am going to talk about the notion of « Locations and forms of Power ». First of all, I would like to give a definition of that notion. So, the power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question and resist it. In order to illustrate this notion, I would like to talk about some documents related to African Americans which I studied in class. We can wonder how did the African Americans obtain recognition. In a first part, we will look at how White people manage to maintain power, then, we will focus on the African Americans’ struggle to conquer power and finally, we’ll highlight that this fight, despite a clear move, is far from over.
Firstly, we studied a drawing depicting the auction of some black people. This document illustrate the « White Supremacy ». Indeed, we can see white men and we notice that they are richly dressed and some of them hold chips. There is also black people including men, women and children, who are crying and Black women are on their knees begging whites to not to be separated from their families. Indeed, since the 17th century, White people saw themselves as superior to people of other racial backgrounds and that therefore whites should politically dominate non-whites. For decades racism and white supremacy has been common attitudes. White supremacists believed that black people had to be enslaved and deprived of all their rights as human beings, therefore, they were dehumanized and considered as cattle. Most of the time, blacks were sold to work on cotton fields where they were beaten and whipped as we can see on the picture. What’s more, they were separated from their families and felt desperate.
This attitude began to change after the Civil war, a war for freedom, which lasted from 1861 to 1865 and led to te signing of the 13th Amendment by A. Lincoln abolishing slavery. This event is the beginning of the struggle of African Americans to conquer power, but they has not yet been recognized.
Indeed, We may compare two documents and see that there is a gap between them: The first document presents the Civil Rights Amendments where we can read that the 14th Amendment allowed Civil Rights for everyone regardless of race, nevertheless, The Jim Crows laws appear after the Civil War, distinguishing citizens according to their race, for example, Blacks and Whites couldn’t shake hands because it would imply they were socially equal, or they were not supposed to eat together but if they did, a some sort of partition was to be placed between them. Besides, they were not permitted to go to some places (bus, bars, schools…) and they were humiliated because they were called by some derogatory term. Those documents help us to understand, despite the progress made, the submission of African Americans to White power remains an ideology rooted in society.
Then, we can say that slavery was giving way to segregation. In class, we listened a recording telling that in response to this racial discrimination, in 1955, Rosa Parks, an African American civil rights activist, refused to relinquish her seat to a white passenger like it was written on the Jim Crow Laws, because she couldn’t support the treatment inflicted on African Americans. She was arrested and convicted of violating the laws of segregation. At the same time, Civil rights Activists initiated a boycott of the Montgomery bus system until Rosa Parks was free. The civil rights movement was born aims to get African American recognition by the laws and society. The bus boycott also helped to transform a black American preacher named Martin Luther King to National Prominence. M. King like other people struggled against the segregationist laws by using pacifist ways as civil disobedience or demonstration. One of the most famous demonstrations took place in Washington in 1963, and during this one, MLK made his famous speech: « I Have A Dream » so as to call from an end of the racism in the United States and an equal world. What’s more, we studied a photo that features President Johnson, surrounded by MLK, signing the Civil Right Act of 1964 ending Segregation for good.
Finally, African Americans managed to obtain recognition as can be seen in a cartoon of Obama’s inauguration as the president. He is surrounded by Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King and Obama is telling them he couldn’t be here without them. This caricature shows that the election of Obama as a president was an incredible victory for Blacks who started as slaves and now have reached the highest position of the country. However, the recognition isn’t total and, in fact, today, Segregation gave way to racism. We can take the example of the the murder of Tamir Rice, a twelve year old boy by an officer in 2014. He shot him dead while he was playing because he believed that he was a man holding a gun. The officer was not charged that’s implies that the boy was killed because he was black as if a black life didn’t matter. In response, the hashtag BLM began to spread on social media and became an organization initiated by Alicia Garza, a black activist, and two of her friends. BLM has been called a new wave civil rights movement or a social media phenomenon. BLM protesters stand for stopping police brutality against African American, denouncing racial inequality and institutional racism. Today, this is well-known.
To conclude, we can say that the history of African Americans had been long and difficult. Slavery was an unjust power that leads to civil war in America, and consequently slaves’ release. Today, blacks have more rights and freedom especially in a country where the president was black. Several events in the recognition of African Americans has increased, although today the recognition is not total. Indeed, racism is very active and is still on the increase especially in a country where the president is racist.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-05-2018 08:58
Message de amiraalg posté le 01-05-2018 à 02:33:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous sollicite afin d'avoir une correction de mon texte concernant la notion "Places and forms of Power" mais également des avis si cela est possible.
Merci d'avance.
I am going to talk about the notion of « Locations and forms of Power ». First of all, I would like to give a definition of that notion. So, the power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question and resist it. In order to illustrate this notion, I would like to talk about some documents related to African Americans which I studied in class. We can wonder how did the African Americans obtain recognition. In a first part, we will look at how White people manage to maintain power, then, we will focus on the African Americans’ struggle to conquer power and finally, we’ll highlight that this fight, despite a clear move, is far from over.
Firstly, we studied a drawing depicting the auction of some black people. This document illustrate the « White Supremacy ». Indeed, we can see white men and we notice that they are richly dressed and some of them hold chips. There is also black people including men, women and children, who are crying and Black women are on their knees begging whites to not to be separated from their families. Indeed, since the 17th century, White people saw themselves as superior to people of other racial backgrounds and that therefore whites should politically dominate non-whites. For decades racism and white supremacy has been common attitudes. White supremacists believed that black people had to be enslaved and deprived of all their rights as human beings, therefore, they were dehumanized and considered as cattle. Most of the time, blacks were sold to work on cotton fields where they were beaten and whipped as we can see on the picture. What’s more, they were separated from their families and felt desperate.
This attitude began to change after the Civil war, a war for freedom, which lasted from 1861 to 1865 and led to te signing of the 13th Amendment by A. Lincoln abolishing slavery. This event is the beginning of the struggle of African Americans to conquer power, but they has not yet been recognized.
Indeed, We may compare two documents and see that there is a gap between them: The first document presents the Civil Rights Amendments where we can read that the 14th Amendment allowed Civil Rights for everyone regardless of race, nevertheless, The Jim Crows laws appear after the Civil War, distinguishing citizens according to their race, for example, Blacks and Whites couldn’t shake hands because it would imply they were socially equal, or they were not supposed to eat together but if they did, a some sort of partition was to be placed between them. Besides, they were not permitted to go to some places (bus, bars, schools…) and they were humiliated because they were called by some derogatory term. Those documents help us to understand, despite the progress made, the submission of African Americans to White power remains an ideology rooted in society.
Then, we can say that slavery was giving way to segregation. In class, we listened a recording telling that in response to this racial discrimination, in 1955, Rosa Parks, an African American civil rights activist, refused to relinquish her seat to a white passenger like it was written on the Jim Crow Laws, because she couldn’t support the treatment inflicted on African Americans. She was arrested and convicted of violating the laws of segregation. At the same time, Civil rights Activists initiated a boycott of the Montgomery bus system until Rosa Parks was free. The civil rights movement was born aims to get African American recognition by the laws and society. The bus boycott also helped to transform a black American preacher named Martin Luther King to National Prominence. M. King like other people struggled against the segregationist laws by using pacifist ways as civil disobedience or demonstration. One of the most famous demonstrations took place in Washington in 1963, and during this one, MLK made his famous speech: « I Have A Dream » so as to call from an end of the racism in the United States and an equal world. What’s more, we studied a photo that features President Johnson, surrounded by MLK, signing the Civil Right Act of 1964 ending Segregation for good.
Finally, African Americans managed to obtain recognition as can be seen in a cartoon of Obama’s inauguration as the president. He is surrounded by Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King and Obama is telling them he couldn’t be here without them. This caricature shows that the election of Obama as a president was an incredible victory for Blacks who started as slaves and now have reached the highest position of the country. However, the recognition isn’t total and, in fact, today, Segregation gave way to racism. We can take the example of the the murder of Tamir Rice, a twelve year old boy by an officer in 2014. He shot him dead while he was playing because he believed that he was a man holding a gun. The officer was not charged that’s implies that the boy was killed because he was black as if a black life didn’t matter. In response, the hashtag BLM began to spread on social media and became an organization initiated by Alicia Garza, a black activist, and two of her friends. BLM has been called a new wave civil rights movement or a social media phenomenon. BLM protesters stand for stopping police brutality against African American, denouncing racial inequality and institutional racism. Today, this is well-known.
To conclude, we can say that the history of African Americans had been long and difficult. Slavery was an unjust power that leads to civil war in America, and consequently slaves’ release. Today, blacks have more rights and freedom especially in a country where the president was black. Several events in the recognition of African Americans has increased, although today the recognition is not total. Indeed, racism is very active and is still on the increase especially in a country where the president is racist.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 01-05-2018 08:58
Réponse : Bac/lieux et formes de pouvoir de laure95, postée le 01-05-2018 à 15:12:19 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- So, the (enlever the)power is the ability
- We can wonder how did the African Americans obtain recognition: ordre des mots (question indirecte)
- This document illustrate: faute de conjugaison.
- some of them hold chips: mettre au présent be +-ing (description)
- There is also black people: there is + singulier.
- begging whites to (enlever to) not to be separated from their families.
- Indeed, since the 17th century, White people saw (since + present perfect) themselves
- Fordecades racism and white supremacy has (faute de conjugaison)been common attitudes.
- This (pas le bon mot au passé) attitude began to change after the Civil war,
- led to te signing
- This event is (passé)the beginning of the struggle
- but they has (faute de conjugaison) not yet been recognized.
- Indeed, We (pas de majuscule)may compare two documents
- a some (choisir entre ces 2 mots)sort of partition
- they were called by some derogatory term (mettre au pluriel).
- Then, we can say that slavery was giving way to segregation: pas le bon temps.
- In class, we listened (préposition) a recording telling (pas le bon verbe ici)that
- The civil rights movement was born aims: ?
- to get African American (marque de la possession) recognition by the laws and society.
- pacifist ways as civil disobedience or demonstration. (mettre au pluriel)
- today, Segregation gave way to racis: pas le bon temps.
- he was a man: he was a CHILD!
- that’s implies : faute de conjugaison.
- To conclude, we can say that the history of African Americans had (présent)been long and difficult.
- Slavery was an unjust power that leads (pas le bon temps)to civil war in America
Good job but too long!
Réponse : Bac/lieux et formes de pouvoir de amiraalg, postée le 02-05-2018 à 00:15:54 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici mon texte corrigé cependant il subsiste quelques corrections que je comprends pas, les voici:
- This (pas le bon mot au passé) attitude began to change after the Civil war,
- Then, we can say that slavery was giving way to segregation: pas le bon temps.
- to get African American (marque de la possession) recognition by the laws and society.
- today, Segregation gave way to racis: pas le bon temps.
I am going to talk about the notion of « Locations and forms of Power ». First of all, I would like to give a definition of that notion. So, power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question and resist it. In order to illustrate this notion, I would like to talk about some documents related to African Americans which I studied in class. We can wonder how African Americans obtain recognition. In a first part, we will look at how White people manage to maintain power, then, we will focus on the African Americans’ struggle to conquer power and finally, we’ll highlight that this fight, despite a clear move, is far from over.
Firstly, we studied a drawing depicting the auction of some black people. This document illustrates the « White Supremacy ». Indeed, we can see white men and we notice that they are richly dressed and some of them are holding chips. There are also black people including men, women and children, who are crying and Black women are on their knees begging whites not to be separated from their families. Indeed, since the 17th century, White people have seen themselves as superior to people of other racial backgrounds and that therefore whites should politically dominate non-whites. For decades racism and white supremacy have been common attitudes. White supremacists believed that black people had to be enslaved and deprived of all their rights as human beings, therefore, they were dehumanized and considered as cattle. Most of the time, blacks were sold to work on cotton fields where they were beaten and whipped as we can see on the picture. What’s more, they were separated from their families and felt desperate.
This attitude began to change after the Civil war, a war for freedom, which lasted from 1861 to 1865 and led to the signing of the 13th Amendment by A. Lincoln abolishing slavery. This event was the beginning of the struggle of African Americans to conquer power, but they had not yet been recognized.
Indeed, we may compare two documents and see that there is a gap between them: The first document presents the Civil Rights Amendments where we can read that the 14th Amendment allowed Civil Rights for everyone regardless of race, nevertheless, The Jim Crows laws appear after the Civil War, distinguishing citizens according to their race, for example, Blacks and Whites couldn’t shake hands because it would imply they were socially equal, or they were not supposed to eat together but if they did, a sort of partition was to be placed between them. Besides, they were not permitted to go to some places (bus, bars, schools…) and they were humiliated because they were called by some derogatory terms. Those documents help us to understand, despite the progress made, the submission of African Americans to White power remains an ideology rooted in society.
Then, we can say that slavery gave way to segregation. In class, we listened to a recording saying that in response to this racial discrimination, in 1955, Rosa Parks, an African American civil rights activist, refused to relinquish her seat to a white passenger like it was written on the Jim Crow Laws, because she couldn’t support the treatment inflicted on African Americans. She was arrested and convicted of violating the laws of segregation. At the same time, Civil rights Activists initiated a boycott of the Montgomery bus system until Rosa Parks was free. The civil rights movement was born. It aimed to get African American recognition by the laws and society. The bus boycott also helped to transform a black American preacher named Martin Luther King to National Prominence. M. King like other people struggled against the segregationist laws by using pacifist ways as civil disobedience or demonstrations. One of the most famous demonstrations took place in Washington in 1963, and during this one, MLK made his famous speech: « I Have A Dream » so as to call from an end of the racism in the United States and an equal world. What’s more, we studied a photo that features President Johnson, surrounded by MLK, signing the Civil Right Act of 1964 ending Segregation for good.
Finally, African Americans managed to obtain recognition as can be seen in a cartoon of Obama’s inauguration as the president. He is surrounded by Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King and Obama is telling them he couldn’t be here without them. This caricature shows that the election of Obama as a president was an incredible victory for Blacks who started as slaves and now have reached the highest position of the country. However, the recognition isn’t total and, in fact, today, Segregation has given way to racism. We can take the example of the the murder of Tamir Rice, a twelve year old boy by an officer in 2014. He shot him dead while he was playing because he believed that he was holding a gun. The officer was not charged that’s imply that the boy was killed because he was black as if a black life didn’t matter. In response, the hashtag BLM began to spread on social media and became an organization initiated by Alicia Garza, a black activist, and two of her friends. BLM has been called a new wave civil rights movement or a social media phenomenon. BLM protesters stand for stopping police brutality against African American, denouncing racial inequality and institutional racism. Today, this is well-known.
To conclude, we can say that the history of African Americans is long and difficult. Slavery was an unjust power that led to civil war in America, and consequently slaves’ release. Today, blacks have more rights and freedom especially in a country where the president was black. Several events in the recognition of African Americans has increased, although today the recognition is not total. Indeed, racism is very active and is still on the increase especially in a country where the president is racist.
Réponse : Bac/lieux et formes de pouvoir de laure95, postée le 02-05-2018 à 09:53:38 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- This (pas le bon mot au passé) attitude began to change after the Civil war: this ne s'emploie pas dans des phrases au passé, il faut utiliser THAT.
- Then, we can say that slavery was giving way to segregation: pas le bon temps: j'aurais mis le preterit simple, pas en be+-ing.
- to get African American (marque de la possession) recognition by the laws and society: il manque le "'s".
- today, Segregation gave way to racis: pas le bon temps: today = marque du présent donc, tu ne peux pas mettre un verbe au passé.
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