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Message de yung97 posté le 28-04-2018 à 21:43:08 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je sollicite votre aide pour savoir si j'ai laissé des fautes dans un devoir que j'ai à rendre.
Merci d'avance.
Nowadays, the management of food is an omnipresent and continuous debate. Indeed, there is a huge waste of useable food. Besides we can have thoughts on the attitude towards food in the United States.to begin, we will think about the main causes and consequences of the mismanagement of food. In the wake of that, we will expose some solutions to tacking this challenge. In order to answer this controversial topic, we dispose a set of document s three press articles from the New-York Times, the website Eenews and National Geographic. Moreover, we can also use a chart and a photo shoted by National Geographic .
According to the fourth document, the waste created by the food production system in North America is 250 KgCO2 per person.in fact; this document shows that the current situation is alarming. To some extent, thanks to the third document the main actor of this awful phenomenon is the food industry. The journalist underlines that their economic and commercial strategy is the main reason of the loss of food. This is supported by the fact that they always want to boost their profits.by the way, the consumers also represent major actors because they usually buy too many foods: the photo of the fifth document shows that. This family overbuys foods, it is also an element that proved that the food industry force families to buy big portions of food. The chart also gives more details; it is the situation is that the most developed countries that produce more waste. We draw a parallel with the photo where the family seems to be proud of their huge consumption of food .Indeed; they would feel sad of that. In other words, those two documents underline that it is a social problem.
In the wake of that, there are many consequences .the first document exposes an alarming situation 15 % of households suffer from a lack of food. It also gives more precision: each part of the American population is more touched than the rest of the population. Furthermore, the waste of food represents a massive loss of money and a huge impact on the environment.
To tackle this issue, the first document underlines that the American administration has started to help people to have a better management of their food and their nutrition. But he may have many improvements on how to packing food and how to inform of the property of the aliment.
As a conclusion, we can say that a better management of food is not an impossible challenge. In fact the bottom line is to change men’s use of food and created eco-friendly mentalities.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-04-2018 21:56
Message de yung97 posté le 28-04-2018 à 21:43:08 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je sollicite votre aide pour savoir si j'ai laissé des fautes dans un devoir que j'ai à rendre.
Merci d'avance.
Nowadays, the management of food is an omnipresent and continuous debate. Indeed, there is a huge waste of useable food. Besides we can have thoughts on the attitude towards food in the United States.to begin, we will think about the main causes and consequences of the mismanagement of food. In the wake of that, we will expose some solutions to tacking this challenge. In order to answer this controversial topic, we dispose a set of document s three press articles from the New-York Times, the website Eenews and National Geographic. Moreover, we can also use a chart and a photo shoted by National Geographic .
According to the fourth document, the waste created by the food production system in North America is 250 KgCO2 per person.in fact; this document shows that the current situation is alarming. To some extent, thanks to the third document the main actor of this awful phenomenon is the food industry. The journalist underlines that their economic and commercial strategy is the main reason of the loss of food. This is supported by the fact that they always want to boost their profits.by the way, the consumers also represent major actors because they usually buy too many foods: the photo of the fifth document shows that. This family overbuys foods, it is also an element that proved that the food industry force families to buy big portions of food. The chart also gives more details; it is the situation is that the most developed countries that produce more waste. We draw a parallel with the photo where the family seems to be proud of their huge consumption of food .Indeed; they would feel sad of that. In other words, those two documents underline that it is a social problem.
In the wake of that, there are many consequences .the first document exposes an alarming situation 15 % of households suffer from a lack of food. It also gives more precision: each part of the American population is more touched than the rest of the population. Furthermore, the waste of food represents a massive loss of money and a huge impact on the environment.
To tackle this issue, the first document underlines that the American administration has started to help people to have a better management of their food and their nutrition. But he may have many improvements on how to packing food and how to inform of the property of the aliment.
As a conclusion, we can say that a better management of food is not an impossible challenge. In fact the bottom line is to change men’s use of food and created eco-friendly mentalities.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-04-2018 21:56
Réponse : Aide/Food industry de gerondif, postée le 28-04-2018 à 23:35:32 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
erreurs en bleu
Nowadays, the management of food is an omnipresent and continuous debate. Indeed, there is a huge waste of useable food. Besides(virgule) we can have thoughts on the attitude towards food in the United States.to begin, we will think about the main causes and consequences of the mismanagement of food. In the wake of that, we will expose some solutions to tacking (tackle)this challenge. In order to answer this controversial topic, we dispose(présent en ing + of) a set of documents three press articles from the New-York Times, the website Eenews and National Geographic. Moreover, we can also use a chart and a photo shoted(participe passé fantaisiste ! Ce verbe est irrégulier) by National Geographic .
According to the fourth document, the waste created by the food production system in North America is 250 KgCO2 per person.in fact; this document shows that the current situation is alarming. To some extent, thanks to the third document the main actor of this awful phenomenon is the food industry. The journalist underlines that their economic and commercial strategy is the main reason of(for) the loss of food. This is supported by the fact that they always want to boost their profits. by the way (pas sûr que "au fait" soit la meilleure transition), the consumers also represent major actors because they usually buy too many foods(too much food): the photo of the fifth document shows that. This family overbuys foods, it is also an element that proved that the food industry force(le s du présent simple) families to buy big portions of food. The chart also gives more details; it is the situation is that(des verbes en trop !) the most developed countries that produce (the most waste, le plus de déchets)more waste. We draw a parallel with the photo where the family seems to be proud of their huge consumption of food .Indeed, they would(plutôt ils devraient ) feel sad of that. In other words, those two documents underline that it is a social problem.
In the wake of that, there are many consequences. The first document exposes an alarming situation : 15 % of households suffer from a lack of food. It also gives more precision: each part of the American population is more touched than the rest of the population( ça ne veut rien dire ! chaque partie de la population américaine est plus touchée que le reste de la population ???). Furthermore, the waste of food represents a massive loss of money and a huge impact on the environment.
To tackle this issue, the first document underlines that the American administration has started to help people to have a better management of their food and their nutrition. But he(qui est ce he ? Il pourrait y avoir est impersonnel et se forme sur there is) may have many improvements on how to packing(base verbale, infinitif sans to) food and how to inform of(au sujet de) the property(pluriel) of the aliment.
As a conclusion, we can say that a better management of food is not an impossible challenge. In fact the bottom line is to change men’s use of food and created(infinitf, et de créer) eco-friendly mentalities.
Réponse : Aide/Food industry de yung97, postée le 01-05-2018 à 00:17:01 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup de votre aide
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