Oral/ Places and Forms of Power

Oral/ Places and Forms of Power
Message de emi1225 posté le 09-12-2017 à 18:14:18 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir tout le monde.
Je prépare mes oraux blanc pour l'anglais . J'ai fini ma notion de Places and Forms of Power. J'aurai besoin d'aide.
J'aimerais bien avoir l'avis de quelqu'un sur mon exposé parce que j'ai pas vraiment l'air convaincu. Est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait m'indiquer où sont les erreurs que j'ai faite afin que je puisse les rectifier.
Merci beaucoup d'avance. Bonne soirée.

First of all I would like to give a definition of “power”. It is the ability or official capacity to exercise control or authority over others. It can be a person, a group, or a nation having great influence over people. Power is exercised through a variety of relationships sustained or accepted, often internalized.
Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens are not afraid to show their opinion and to act contrary to the State, in particular in demonstrations.

The question we can raise is : How did citizens opposed political powers in the 2000s ?
We will see the big demonstrations which most stood out the 2000s with the number of protesters. So, on the hand, we are going to talk about. On the other hand, we are going to talk about.

I-The banking and financial crisis of 2008
At the beginning, it was a trouble bound to the real-estate and it became a global economic crisis. The banks foreclosed. The banks and the investors mad a lot of money. Houses were foreclosed, more population became homeless and now belonged at the have nots. More people couldn't make both ends meet. This movement started in NYC then around the world. It went viral. Today, because of social networks, people could rally all more quickly. People demonstrated in Wall Street, where situate the New York Stock Exchange in lower Manhattan. Because Wall Street is a symbol of big money and financial market. The crowd demonstrated with placards like “Homeless, Jobless, time is hard” or “I'm the hopeless”. This movement denounced the huge discrepancy between the haves and the have nots. They confronted the big money, so the 1% representing the unemployment, and other social ills.

II- The Women's March
On January 21th 2017, one day after the President Trump was in office, people of all background women and men and gender nonconforming people, young and old, of diverse faiths, differently, immigrants and indigenous came together, 5 million strong, on all seven continents of the world.
Demonstrators were answering a call to show up and be counted as those who believe in a world that is equitable, tolerant, just and safe for all, one which the human rights and dignity of each person is protected and our planet is safe from destruction. Grounded in the non-violent ideology of the Civil Rights movement, the Women's March was the largest coordinated protest in U.S history and one of the largest in world history.

Conclusion: The world was born under a new breath with the arrival of the 2000s. People used another ways to express the opinions and assert their powers with the State. People crowd around demonstrations. On the one hand, we can mention the banking and financial crisis of 2008 which marked the US. On the other hand, we saw the Women's March. It was the occasion for the population to show their power and authority relative to the new President.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-12-2017 18:29

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Réponse : Oral/ Places and Forms of Power de laure95, postée le 10-12-2017 à 10:38:42 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens are not (since + present perfect)afraid to show their opinion (pluriel)
- The question we can raise is : How did citizens opposed (mettre à l'infinitif) political powers in the 2000s ?
- on the (il manque un mot) hand, we are going to talk about (about what?). On the other hand, we are going to talk about (about what?).

I-The banking and financial crisis of 2008
- The (pas de the) banks foreclosed.
- The banks and the investors (même remarque)mad (orthographe)a lot of money.
- Houses were foreclosed (répétition, chercher un synonyme),
- more population: mal dit.
- belonged at: pas la bonne préposition.
- This (ne s'utilise pas au passa) movement started in NYC then (all)around the world.
- people could rally all: ?
- where situate the New York Stock Exchange in lower Manhattan: mal construit et verbe mal conjugué.
- This movement denounced


II- The Women's March
- 21th (pas "th" pour ce jour du mois)2017
- one day after the President Trump was in (possessif) office
- faiths: pas le bon mot ici.
- on all (article)seven continents of the world.
- Demonstrators were answering: preterit simpe.
- a call to show up and be counted as those who believe (passé) in a world that is (passé) equitable,
- one which the human rights and dignity of each person is (passé)protected and our planet is (passé)safe

- Conclusion: People used another ways (another + singulier)to express the opinions and assert their powers with the State. People crowd (passé)around demonstrations. On the one hand, we can mention the banking and financial crisis of 2008 which marked (present perfect)the US.

Il manque les références à des documents écrits, audios ou vidéos!

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Réponse : Oral/ Places and Forms of Power de here4u, postée le 10-12-2017 à 11:45:13 (S | E)
Hello!

First of all I would like to give a definition of “power”. It is the ability or official capacity to exercise control or authority over others. It can be a person, a group, or a nation having great influence over people. Power is exercised through a variety of relationships sustained or accepted, often internalized.
Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens are not afraid to show their opinion and to act contrary to the State, in particular in demonstrations.

The question we can raise is : How did citizens opposed political powers in the 2000s ?
We will see the big demonstrations which most stood out the 2000s with the number of protesters. So, on the hand, we are going to talk about. On the other hand, we are going to talk about.

I-The banking and financial crisis of 2008
At the beginning, it was a trouble bound to the real-estate and it became a global economic crisis. The banks foreclosed.what? The banks and the investors mad (made?)a lot of money. Houses were foreclosed, more population became homeless and now belonged at the have nots. More people couldn't make both ends meet. This movement started in NYC then around the world.(very clumsy!) It went viral. Today, because of social networks, people could rally all more quickly. People demonstrated in Wall Street, where situate the New York Stock Exchange (word order + construction!) in lower Manhattan. Because Wall Street is a symbol of big money and financial market. The crowd demonstrated with placards like “Homeless, Jobless, time is hard” or “I'm the hopeless”. This movement denounced the huge discrepancy between the haves and the have nots. They confronted the big money, so the 1% representing the unemployment, and other social ills.

II- The Women's March
On January 21th 2017, one day after the President Trump was in office, people of all background women and men and gender nonconforming people (punctuation?), young and old, of diverse faiths, differently, immigrants and indigenous came together, 5 million strong, on all seven continents of the world.
Demonstrators were answering a call to show up and be counted as those who believe in a world that is equitable, tolerant, just and safe for all, one XX which the human rights and dignity of each person is protected and where our planet is safe from destruction. Grounded in the non-violent ideology of the Civil Rights movement, the Women's March was the largest coordinated protest in U.S history and one of the largest XXXX in world history.(Mixed tenses in this paragraph??? Should be clarified.)

Conclusion: The world was born under a new breath (Lien internet
with the arrival of the 2000s. People used another ways= singular + plural? to express the = possessiveopinions and assert their powers with the State. People crowd = tense) around? demonstrations. On the one hand, we can mention the banking and financial crisis of 2008 which marked the US. On the other hand, we saw the Women's March. It was the occasion for the population to show their power and authority relative to the new President.

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Réponse : Oral/ Places and Forms of Power de emi1225, postée le 10-12-2017 à 19:03:14 (S | E)
Merci davoir pris le temps me lire mon exposé. J'ai fait les modifications. J'ai l'impression que c'est pas assez développé dans le sens que c'est pas assez personnel.

First of all I would like to give a definition of “power”. It is the ability or official capacity to exercise control or authority over others. It can be a person, a group, or a nation having great influence over people. Power is exercised through a variety of relationships sustained or accepted, often internalized.
Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens have been not afraid to show their opinions and to act contrary to the State, in particular in demonstrations.

The question we can raise is : How did citizens oppose political powers in the 2000s ?

We will see the big demonstrations which most stood out the 2000s with the number of protesters. So, on the one hand, we are going to talk about the banking and financial crisis which marked the US. On the other hand, we are going to talk about the Women's March.

I-The banking and financial crisis of 2008

In class, we studied the banking and financial crisis of 2008.
At the beginning, it was a trouble bound to the real-estate and it became a global economic crisis. Banks foreclosed. Banks and investors made a lot of money. Houses were reclaimed, more people became homeless and now belonged to the have nots. More people couldn't make both ends meet. The movement started in NYC then around the world. It went viral. Today, because of social networks, people could gather all more quickly. People demonstrated in Wall Street, where is located the New York Stock Exchange in lower Manhattan. Because Wall Street is a symbol of big money and financial market. The crowd demonstrated with placards like “Homeless, Jobless, time is hard” or “I'm the hopeless”. The movement denounced the huge discrepancy between the haves and the have nots. They confronted the big money, so the 1% representing the unemployment, and other social ills.

II- The Women's March

In class, we studied a video about the Women's March.
On January 21st 2017, one day after President Trump was in his office, people of all background women and men and gender nonconforming people, young and old, of diverse horizon, differently, immigrants and indigenous came together, 5 million strong, on all the seven continents of the world.
Demonstrators answered a call to show up and be counted as those who believed in a world that was equitable, tolerant, just and safe for all, one which the human rights and dignity of each person was protected and our planet was safe from destruction. Grounded in the non-violent ideology of the Civil Rights movement, the Women's March was the largest coordinated protest in U.S history and one of the largest in world history.

Conclusion: The world was born under a new breath with the arrival of the 2000s. People used another way to express the opinions and assert their powers with the State. People crowded around demonstrations. On the one hand, we can mention the banking and financial crisis of 2008 which has marked the US. On the other hand, we saw the Women's March. It was the occasion for the population to show their power and authority relative to the new President.

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Réponse : Oral/ Places and Forms of Power de here4u, postée le 10-12-2017 à 21:51:40 (S | E)
hello!

First of all I would like to give a definition of “power”. It is the ability or official capacity to exercise control or authority over others. It can be(mal dit!) a person, a group, or a nation having great influence over people. Power is exercised through a variety of relationships sustained or accepted, often internalized.
Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens have been not (ordre des mots) afraid to show their opinions and to act contrary to the State, in particular in demonstrations.

The question we can raise is : How did citizens oppose political powers in the 2000s ?

We will see the big demonstrations which most stood out the 2000s with the number of protesters. So, on the one hand, we are going to talk about the banking and financial crisis which marked the US. On the other hand, we are going to talk about the Women's March.

I-The banking and financial crisis of 2008

In class, we studied the banking and financial crisis of 2008.
At the beginning, it was a trouble bound to the real-estate and it became a global economic crisis. Banks foreclosed. Banks and investors made a lot of money. Houses were reclaimed, more people became homeless and now belonged to the have nots(mal dit!). More people couldn't (had difficulties to )make both ends meet. The movement started in NYC then around the world. It went viral. Today, because of social networks, people could gather all more quickly. People demonstrated in Wall Street, where is located the New York Stock Exchange in lower Manhattan. Because Wall Street is a symbol of big money and financial market. The crowd demonstrated with placards like “Homeless, Jobless, time is hard” or “I'm the hopeless”. The movement denounced the huge discrepancy between the haves and the have nots. They confronted the big money, so the 1% representing the unemployment, and other social ills.

II- The Women's March

In class, we studied a video about the Women's March.
On January 21st 2017, one day after President Trump was in his office, people of all background women and men and gender nonconforming people, young and old, of diverse horizon, differently, immigrants and indigenous came together, 5 million strong, on all the seven continents of the world.
Demonstrators answered a call to show up and be counted as those who believed in a world that was equitable, tolerant, just and safe for all, one which the human rights and dignity of each person was protected and our planet was safe from destruction. Grounded in the non-violent ideology of the Civil Rights movement, the Women's March was the largest coordinated protest in U.S history and one of the largest XXXW in XXX world history.

Conclusion: The world was born under a new breath with the arrival of the 2000s. People used another way to express the opinions and assert their powers with the State. People crowded around demonstrations. On the one hand, we can mention the banking and financial crisis of 2008 which has marked the US. On the other hand, we saw the Women's March. It was the occasion for the population to show their power and authority relative to the new President.

Vous ne tenez pas compte des erreurs indiquées ... Trop de répétitions aussi ...
Il ne sert à rien de vouloir tout écrire, ni tout dire, à un oral. Mieux vaut un plan détaillé et parler, développer des idées personnelles, plutôt que de vouloir se souvenir par coeur de quelque chose d'aussi long !

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Réponse : Oral/ Places and Forms of Power de emi1225, postée le 13-12-2017 à 17:46:52 (S | E)
Bonsoir
j'ai pris en compte les remarques qui m'ont été faites. Donc je l'ai refait en essayant de faire des phrases plus simples et plus personnelles. Est-ce que vous pensez que c'est bon ?

ORAL ANGLAIS : PLACES AND FORMS OF POWER
The notion I’m going to deal with is “seats and forms of Power”.
Let me begin by defining “power”. It is the ability or official capacity to exercise control or authority over others. It can be a person, a group, or a nation having great influence over people. Power is exercised through a variety of relationships sustained or accepted, often internalized.
Since the beginning of the twenty-first century, citizens have not been afraid to show their opinions and to act contrary to the State, in particular in demonstrations.
The question we can raise is : How did citizens oppose political powers in the 2000s?
So, on the one hand, we are going to talk about the banking and financial crisis which marked the US. On the other hand, we are going to talk about the Women's March.

I - THE WOMEN'S MARCH
The first document I’m going to describe is about is video from the television news which  dates to back to January 2017. The article reports on the Women's March. This demonstration established to promote the women rights, the questions of LGBT rights and to the reforms of immigration.
500 000 participants including men gathered in the street of Washington DC for the investiture of Donald Trump. A lot of people carried a pink hats with little ears of cats. Where from the nickname “pussy hats”. It is plays on words from Donald Trump in a scandalous video where he highlighted to have the ability to pay all women he desires.
Despite the many battles they had waged against the traditional conventions, it is clear that women are not still equal to the men in various subjects in particular at work. In my view, their fights are not over so that someday that there is a real equality between men and women.

II - SUBPRIME MORTGAGE CRISIS
The second document I’m going to describe is about is a cartoon from Clay Bennett. We can see a policeman arrest man in the street carrying a badge. In this badge, it is written 1% which represent the have nots.
At the beginning, it was a trouble bound to real-estate and it became a global economic crisis. Banks foreclosed. Banks and investors made a lot of money. Houses were reclaimed, more people became homeless and now belonged to the have nots.
More people couldn't have difficulties to  make both ends meet. The movement started in NYC then around the world. It went viral. Today, because of social networks, people could all gather more quickly. People demonstrated in Wall Street, where it is located the New York Stock Exchange in lower Manhattan. Because Wall Street is a symbol of big money and financial market. The crowd demonstrated with placards like “Homeless, Jobless, time is hard” or “I'm the hopeless”. The movement denounced the huge discrepancy between the haves and the have nots. They confronted the big money, so the 1% representing the unemployment, and other social ills.
Conclusion:
To put it in a nutshell, despite that the USA is a country which support the freedom and the equality, there are still exist today numerous inequalities. As a consequence, these pacifist demonstrations are necessary to show our disagreements and to hope one day a world without inequalities.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-12-2017 22:08

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